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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous10/07/06

Incredible story

That was the most Incredible piece of a story i have read.
Pat .

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by michaella_cd01/25/09

Intensley Erotic

For a short story I found this to be powerfully erotic. I was breathless - carried along with the girls excitement. Thank you for this story. X

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by Anonymous07/20/15

Almost great

This is a nice little erotic story spoiled by one thing. About half-way through the tale, and half-way through a paragraph, you switched tenses from the past tense to the present. It doesn't matter which tense you use for a story (although I prefer the past tense), keep it consistent all the way through.

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