Thought this worked EXTREMELY well. Described the characters vividly, and mostly within the flow of the story. Characters were acting horny but not unrealistically (although what would I know about 18 yr old fraternal twins). Slowly revealed their history together, hinted at the future. And it built up nicely, to a non-sexual conclusion -- verrrrry teasing.
I recognize the story is 5 yrs old (from 2006). Maybe the author has a creative way of bringing it current... anything ever happen between them?
But I really value the piece because it was literally a snapshot in time, just a few minutes, giving us the background and foreshadowing the future, teasing us, then moving on. VERY sexy!
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Nice
and short but right to the point, I loved it
Nice
Nice start...short and sweet.
Excellent storytelling.
You told precisely what you wanted to tell, with implied background and possible future. I salute your writing style, poptartdc. Thanks!
Great start--
Great start---Will there be more? I hope so, I really like the beginning--
I Wonder?
Lovely short story. Wondering if it reflects hidden desires?
GREAT sexy li'l snapshot!
Thought this worked EXTREMELY well. Described the characters vividly, and mostly within the flow of the story. Characters were acting horny but not unrealistically (although what would I know about 18 yr old fraternal twins). Slowly revealed their history together, hinted at the future. And it built up nicely, to a non-sexual conclusion -- verrrrry teasing.
I recognize the story is 5 yrs old (from 2006). Maybe the author has a creative way of bringing it current... anything ever happen between them?
But I really value the piece because it was literally a snapshot in time, just a few minutes, giving us the background and foreshadowing the future, teasing us, then moving on. VERY sexy!
nice
no sex but hot anyway. well done.
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