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This story was too short, had several grammatical and punctuation errors, lacked dialogue, and was anatomically incorrect on at least one point (location of the hymen). On the other hand, it was extremely hot in its description of the sex, the attraction was understandable, and it made good use of the interracial appeal. It also had a hint of a plot.
For those reasons, it salvaged a 4. This writer has some potential. I suspect that English is not his or her first language, so the writer should do better once his or her command of the language improves.
Nice work- keep it up!
Keep them coming!
It was very good
I liked this story. But I do not agree with ServerMax's comment about grammatical and punctuation errors. We are all at fault at times for these errors.
I checked on some of his stories as well and they quite a few errors in them as well
Keep up the good work
White cock
I envy the Indian woman; I need a white stud cook too!
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