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Much Better!
Chapter 2 is much better than Chapter 1. Michelle's attitude went from "trying to find a piece of meat" to trying to create a relationship. She still has a long way to go, but she is becoming a more attractive woman.
Nookiehunter
Better and better!
This is getting better and beter, please hurry with more!
Good, but not great
Continues the tone set by Part I
but does not quite match its standard
Still way too many mistakes
For something that you say has been edited, there are still way too many mistakes: "tiled" instead of "tilted" for example.
The story is pretty good, but the proof-reading leaves a lot to be desired.
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