by amypussy
You need to continue this story. Maybe you could have francine use an enema on tom.
where are the spinster mussels?
are they sad and lonely unmarried mussels that no other mussels wants to marry?
Sphincter Muscles not spinster mussels
Had potential.... but way too short and way too shitty.... no charachter build up, no story line.... no point.... unless you are a premature ejaculator......
Sorry, honest but true....
You seem to be a good writer, just put a little more thought into charachter and story development. This one coulda, shoulda.... been a 3 pager....(story, that is) Not knocking you, your imagination or your creativity.... just knocking the limits you bind yourself within.
Would love to read more... about this story.
Be well, and take my criticism with an open mind....
~L~
i can't believe how much this turned me on! i like stories where the husband is dominant and the wife tries so hard to be good.this story is sooo good.thanks.more? mam
What a pile of crap.
First....... find out how a spell checker works, then try using it.
Secondly..... try an enema on yourself and then you can write about what it can do to people.
Thirdly...... try a new hobby - writing erotica is not something your good at.
Thank you for the effort but this was really a horrible story. It was too short and really only gave a glimpse of what could be a very hot story. The spelling and grammar mistakes were terrible and I'm surprised this was even approved.
Interesting story - I would love to have read what happens next. Sure, there may be some typos however the overall story arc is solid and the descriptions are vivid.
my ex husband like to give me a hard spanking then big warm soapy enema
I suggest you get in contact with an editor. While the story is good, it needs some serious proofreading..."spinster mussels" or sphincter muscles?...spinster is an unmarried woman beyond chances to get married and mussels are shellfish...seriously!
For spousal abuse. Who wants an abusive, manipulative ass for a husband? Awful story.
So the female character has mollusks in her rectum? I can’t even guess what spinster is referring to? I’m usually easy-going when it comes to composition errors in erotica. Perhaps the author meant to write “sphincter muscles?“ Maybe he or she was trying to be funny? I hate to be discouraging but this is poorly written. Sorry.
My husband gives me enemas before giving it to me in my butt I’m on all fours and he stands behind me with the enema He then inserts a plug into me so I don’t drip. If it’s nice weather we go out and I must wear a dress or skirt with no panties. Once I humiliated myself because I began to drip. When we were back homebelet me expell itand I got a serious spanking I was givensnemas everyday for a week.
I would be in seventh heaven if my husband disciplined me like this. I am envious of any woman whose man will do this. I'd be happy with a really good paddling.
HAHAHAHAHA TIGHTEN YOUR “SPINSTER” MUSCLES HAHAHAHAH OMG I’M CRYING