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Beautiful
I love sibling love stories. This one was brilliant and brought a tear to my eye. I just wish it was longer, maybe a bit more buildup. Other than that, I loved it!
again
loved it again, second read.
Thank you
Loved your story
Loved the story. Will is a great care giver and brother-turned-lover. If he shaves her pussy, I hope he leaves his own hairy pubes alone. I'd even like to see a bit of chest hair for the young man. A really sexy site on a young man!
Yes
I loved it. It brought a tear in my eye and warmth to my heart. I really did love it.
Confusing/Not-so-Good start with amazing End
The first half was bad. I didn't like how he simply ignored what his sister did. He was supposed to be angry but it never showed! I understand what he did was wrong but the way she reacted was simply unforgivable! Entire colony? That kind thin simply destroys a young man's life! yet it never showed! The flow was more like the generic "Two moderately friendly siblings who suddenly realize they are attracted to each other and then do something about it" kind of story with awkward/meaningless fight-start. Nonetheless, the writing was good and with better planning it could have been better. What I would have liked was a really pissed off(in quite 'I am not talking to you' kind of way) brother who only goes there because he owes his mother so much(like he said) and a somewhat guilty sister who tries to make up for the 4 years of stubbornness all while fighting her own stubborn nature. That would have made a much more plausible and interesting story! Good job any ways and do write some more stories with lesser plot-holes(I know it is an erotica site but still...)
J. Jamie Dupane
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