What this story lacked in length it more than made up for in the spontaneity and focus on the characters. Well Written and delightful in spite of being short. Oh, Writer - should you be teasing us that way? You are planning to continue the story, aren't you? *laughing* Well Written!
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Anonymous10/13/10
*****
Slightly better editing wouldn't hurt, but I liked it.
English
Good Start
Great start. Keep it comin!!!!!!!!
Keep Going!
It's good so far please keep going!!!!
Short & Sweet!
What this story lacked in length it more than made up for in the spontaneity and focus on the characters. Well Written and delightful in spite of being short. Oh, Writer - should you be teasing us that way? You are planning to continue the story, aren't you? *laughing* Well Written!
*****
Slightly better editing wouldn't hurt, but I liked it.
good story
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