by RhymeFairy
Fairy girl. This is good. This poem shows and doesn't just tell. You show images. You leave wonderful clues to what's going on, like with your phrase: tabletop thoughts. Your words lead up to the feast.
This line is a standout in the poem: "bountiful boudoir of coy glances." Even the word bountiful has the reader thinking feast.
I don't really care for alliteration, despite that, this poem had me following it to 'rivers edge.' My favorite line is 'a leisure morphing of partially taken pathways,' though it seems like a coma after pathways might help.
BD
.....love this poet for the strides she's made. This is simply lovely.
Tess
This is great and I love the allusion to an instant message conversation. You've made me hungry and I can't wait to feast on my bountiful spread.
well-chosen, well-ordered ajectives/phrases; very seductive indeed! Nicely done!
nice write (~_~)definitely an excellent literary journey <grin you would win altmania with this write <grin, I had no idea it was your poem (~_*)
Great stuff, Heather, good use of imagery and your language has a nice musicality to it.
love and hugs
V/D
xx
Your words paint vivd and evocative images.
Rhymeville must be quite a place.