All Comments on 'Taint'

by RhymeFairy

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WickedEveWickedEveover 17 years ago
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Fairy girl. This is good. This poem shows and doesn't just tell. You show images. You leave wonderful clues to what's going on, like with your phrase: tabletop thoughts. Your words lead up to the feast.

This line is a standout in the poem: "bountiful boudoir of coy glances." Even the word bountiful has the reader thinking feast.

Bill DadaBill Dadaover 17 years ago
^

I don't really care for alliteration, despite that, this poem had me following it to 'rivers edge.' My favorite line is 'a leisure morphing of partially taken pathways,' though it seems like a coma after pathways might help.

BD

GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasureover 17 years ago
I...........

.....love this poet for the strides she's made. This is simply lovely.

Tess

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Wow

Oh ya, this is hot, very steamy Rhymey girl. *sweats*

champagne1982champagne1982over 17 years ago
Rich

This is great and I love the allusion to an instant message conversation. You've made me hungry and I can't wait to feast on my bountiful spread.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Always

delight in your words RF! thanks for the feast.

TT :)

Man RayMan Rayover 17 years ago
Lovely, RhymeFariy...

well-chosen, well-ordered ajectives/phrases; very seductive indeed! Nicely done!

My Erotic TrailMy Erotic Trailover 17 years ago
excellent

nice write (~_~)definitely an excellent literary journey <grin you would win altmania with this write <grin, I had no idea it was your poem (~_*)

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
good

Great stuff, Heather, good use of imagery and your language has a nice musicality to it.

love and hugs

V/D

xx

LeBrozLeBrozover 17 years ago
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A meal spread out to

Quench every soul's

Deepest hunger.

saw_man1saw_man1over 17 years ago
The rivers edge?

Your words paint vivd and evocative images.

Rhymeville must be quite a place.

Anonymous
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