All Comments on 'Daddy's Secret'

you need to picture the action in your mind as you write and edit

Some of this doesn't come together just right.

Just a little quick jumping from one action to the other but a fairly good first attempt.

Irregardless, please keep writing, but try to make it more fluid and allow a little more to each piece of action.

Your story was good and fast and short. Please continue with part 2 .

This was very good for the frist time .You need to add ch.2and 3 to it . and make it some what longer. But a real good start

I liked many aspects of your story. Parts were a little rough but, overall, you seem to know what excites you. Don't be afraid to throw in a bit more detail, and a bit more emotion. All this takes practice, so keep at it and write lots more!

Peace

Great story, just really want my dad Rick to do me! I've teased him since I was...younger. I'm 29 now, still teasing, but he's scared shitless of bitch mum. I'm stacy18_bi at Hotmail if you want to hit me up

I saw porn on daddys computer and wondered if he was thinking of me as he watched it. i often fingered myself in bed wishing it was daddys fingers or better stil his cock. never got the chance to find out as he was killed in a RTC, what I say is

'if you have feeling for your daddy, act on them before its too late'

Short quick story and i loved it. Please add more to it .Get rid of that wife of his.

She is cheating on him anyway .