BBW Babysitting

could of been better

First, why would a babysitter be wearing a teddy? No parent would allow that from a babysitter. Second, it really isn't nonconsent, she seemed to be hinting that she would be willing if he didn't tell. She kept him there. She could have let him go. Also, if the child was breathing why would she call a doctor for choking. Obviously the child was breathing. I know this is just a story but it doesn't really make sense. It needs more detail, more reality. It didn't seem to be well thought out.

don't worry about the previous negative comment

How can you take seriously criticism of story development from someone who can't even get basic grammar correct?

I despair of the failing intelligence when I see and hear "could of" when it should actually be "could have". Not only is this habit characteristic of lazy speech, it strongly conveys the impression that the speaker/writer is illiterate.

Secondly, this is erotica, a story to masturbate to. How about giving the author a little bit of artisitic licence? If I wanted to read pedantic medical accuracy, I'd buy a Robin Cook novel, not read Literotica.

To the author - I liked your story. I'd like to know what the nasty doctor was going to do to next.

Please keep up the BBW theme; there's not that many stories to keep chubby-chasers like me happy around here.

good story

loved the story cant wait for next part

all excited

this is a great story CANNOT WAIT FOR THE NEXT PART

Hoping

Hurry up with the next chapter about to blow my load

Can't wait to read the next one.

anticipation is killing me...

write more please