All Comments on 'A Couple's First Time'

No time spent on development, and really not particularly erotic.

In addition (get ready to sigh, those of you who hate complaints about writing), the author cannot seem to decide on past or present tense. Punctuation is lousy, and of course there is no reason in the world why "You're" should be spelled properly ("Your fucking tight.").

The best laugh was when she called him Brain (instead of Brian).

Really, people, editors are willing to help.

Do you understand the difference between the present tense and the past tense?

I wasn't even turned on, it was so poorly written! It was over B4 it even started. U may want 2 see a Dr about premature ejaculation, dude!

Worst i've read

Ugh.

This is just plain horrible and extremely unwell written.

I agree...It's pretty weak....