A Bottle of Merlot

Excellent Erotica!

Can't even think of characters I would
Rather enjoy than these!
I would love to read more about these two
Perfect lovers in another story. Such a
Poetic approach to erotic writing, where the
Lovers are real, and the details are so vividly
Erotic and pleasing!

Eileen

Very good story line

I enjoyed your story. I'm new to Literotia and will read all of your stories. Please keep writting.

Your best yet!

This is no doubt right up there with some of your best work! Will you be a pirate this year for Halloween?

Sasha

Aye matey

Captain Beth walks across the deck of the Golden Pussy making a strange sound of thud, clunk, thud, clunk as first her boot touches the wood followed by her peg leg. She surveys the crew of mostly women and a few men as a fight breaks out, swords rattling, to see who gets to sleep with her tonight. First one person falls, then another, others choose to drink rum captured the day before. Finally Mary Read wins and we walk hand in hand to my cabin.

Happy Halloween
Beth

Love

Marybeth thats a great and moving story and it has so much love in it what state were they in?
Pat
Atlanta,Ga

Nice

Good story but I felt that the odds were stacked. Yes ok its a story,I know. Well written and fun, thanks hon I really liked it.

So Beautiful and moving

Marybeth i truly loved your story i would love to see how the do with the rest of there lives .
Atlanta,Ga

Utterly Banal

I hated this story. It was utterly unrealistic, completely banal, unarousing, and written like a bad letter to Penthouse Forum. I'm sure some men might like it because it feeds into their idea of the way women "act" when they're having sex. But, as a card-carrying lesbian, I found it stupid. Nothing sexy about encounters so contrived.

please spellcheck!

Nearly fell into a comma? Good grief!

WONDERFUL!!

Thank you!

Not Banal...

Loved it...;>)

Shallow

This read a bit like a porn script. It's hard to get into the story when you know the 'characters' are contrived constructs that are just bumbling along until you can write sex.

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Anybody who writes about sucking a clit like a penis is either a virgin or a man. Ridiculous.

very detailed

i liked your enthusiasm, and with reguards to the previous comments, i've personally sucked both cock and pussy and the principle is the same. don't knock what you know nothing about.
props to you marybethf, keep on writing

lovely

This was a lovely story. Those two sure fell in love in a hurry. I love that they're going to move in with each other and they bought each other rings, you should write more of this.

I loved it!

Great story!

Lots of love, and still very erotic. Thank you for sharing it with us!