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Annoying characters
Again, too much backstory, coupled by annoying characters. I loathe the heroine and her sense of superiority. On top of that, she's a lush that beat up her boss because her boyfriend left her. She should have gotten arrested instead of being just fired. What's she going to do when she has her first fight with whoever becomes the hero? Beat him up too?
This story? I think I'll pass...
Author to yet another 'Anonymous' Hero
You appear too hasty for instant gratification. It's a story that drifts in which the heroine will beome a more complete person once she gets her 'prop'. In real life people drift, flounder and pick themselves up, again and again. In real life heroes and heroines can be flawed characters and real life is awash with backstory. Come on.
not as good as first chapter
this chapter is not a good as the first chapter, IMHO.
it is a bit more confusing, with lot of names and characters running in and out. this story is not Grand Central station.
other than that, it is the same quality work.
not bad, but...
you'll have to change the tempo -
soon
better late than never.
good but....
you have to explain some of the meaning of the words or phares they use for ex: swot?
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