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excellent
A thoughtful and uplifting story
Beautiful
Simply beautiful!!!
Great
It's been said before, but this has been really well written! A plesant surprise to find such good writing on lit-e; you really have a good grasp on people and how much difference one person can make to another.
Flabbergasted
I don't know if I spelled that word correctly, but who cares. This story absolutely amazed me, not only by the very professional writing, but by the depth of feeling it evoked. Author, may I suggest that you submit this for publication. There's got to be a market for such works of literary art.
A nice story
The horror of addition is a cruel reality in our society.
Be it food, alcohol, drugs or something else so many people suffer from its effects. What causes a person to destroy their life is often buried so deep that many times they never find it and the addiction ruins them. I doubt many understand how unusual this story is because the odds are so against a person recovering from an addiction.
Interestingly enough it is usually a proverbial kick in the groin, like the one Melissa gave you in the pool, that causes the addict to bottom out and then seek help. In fact I don't blame Melissa's step father for turning his back on her. Sometimes that is just what needs to be done just like that same friend insisting that you go to a pool party and meet your own demons.
I have a brother who has battled an addiction to Crystal Meth and, like yourself, I find myself battling my impulses to overeat constantly. Like you and Melissa we are both in good shape now. Yet the AA axiom, "One day at a time", is so true. You have to be so vigilant.
This story was well done. My only criticism is that you should have gone into more detail regarding what your own addiction did to you and the pain you witnessed Melissa go through. Then again, maybe this was enough for you. I wish you luck.
Your story
Your story has been reviewed. You can see the review on the New story reviews thread on the Authors' Hangout here: http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?t=4 28901&page=11&pp=25
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Beautiful story.
I saw your story reviewed in the Author's Hangout and enjoyed it immensely.
janiexx
Very nicely done
and told with great sensitivity.
There is a lot for one to think about in this story if they take the time. I guess everyone could/should look in the mirror, and quietly ask, "What good am I to anyone?"
First rate!
Regards, DJ
Ditto Blue88
Unusually well written story. Well done! Your ending was not what I expected, but upon reflection, made sense.
Thank You
Thanks for telling this story. I'm battling my own weight demons and addiction issues. Seeing this story in print reminded me of the rewards and the obligations of getting my act together.
Your story is very sensitive and moving. I feel whole again after reading this.
Very Nice
Like the previous poster I too have been flirting with doing something about extra pounds and I think this story has given me the incentive to finally start the process.
If only all of humanity could have the character of Jeff, a man who realizes that other people have value and that everyone should have someone who stands by them.
In my stories I do not have husbands standing by cheating wives as some people would like to always happen. Those however are stories and not real life for me. I would hope each of us has at least one person who would be our "Jeff".
Thanks for a wonderful read.
Charleybear
A Stirring Tale, well written
CAP,
You managed to write a wonderful emotionally charged tale without resorting to obvious sex to get the reader involved. CONGRATULATIONS and WELL DONE. The only thing that would make the story better is if it were true! Look forward to reading more of your work!
You & Your Talent Sold Me - KUDO's Author
Impressive and rational throughout. Just fine work Author.
All that in hopes of more works of respect and lifelike reality that entertains most.
With High Regard
I was checking non erotic rankings. . .
since I thought Cliffs at Baja might be doing will. It was, your story is correctly ranked even better.
You got my 5.
Pretty damn cool story there...
It's refreshing to read some prose that has a redeeming value. Kristin reeled in quite a catch indeed. Nice work!
refreshing!
Your writing has such gentle compassion! Its so nice to read. I hope you're publishe din a book somewhere!
Truly Exceptional
I believe this could be accepted for publication in almost any of the top magazines in America. Thank you for letting us read your thoughts.
I've been there...
Four years ago I weighed 320 lbs. Today, 200. Fighting the demons of obesity has been the toughest battle of my life. You have captured the feelings and express them magnificently. I agree -- publish this for wider exposure.
Very Nice :)
Good read. You have captured the amount of self control and the fighting it takes to combat one's demons, and I salute you.
- J
Endearing Story, but
Very nitce story, but you really needed to have at least implied that he and Kristin were a real item and not just buds, as he was with her other babes.
It was a bit like Russian roulette. He could have gone the other way, you know?
Her comments could easily have bruised his ego to the point where he fell even further into the grip of food. It really is "comfort food".
LOVED IT!
I LOVED IT! it was so beautiful the way you put your story and i could actually see the scenes from your story VERY VERY TALENTED IF I DO SAY SO MYSELF BRAVA!
thank you
very good story. thank you for sharing
TO ANSWER THE QUESTION
wait until I am good for myself 1st. TK U MLJ LV NV
surprisingly emotional
I love the way this story progresses. I teared up when I read the part where Melissa started attending AA meetings. Very beautiful.
Excellent
One person who needed redemption returning the favor. Everything is good with the world. Shame it's fiction.
Yess
I have a see few of these situations, your story reflects how most of them go
Well Done.
Nice little story,
You just need to add a little more Beef to it.
Sorry about that, you got some kind of plot/story line, maybe add the EX into some drama. You don't have a real climax. And damn you could of have added/had many anti-climaxes with this basic story. This is my first read of your stories, I think it was a nice story, but......bill
I'll keep reading your stuff
It's good that he lost the weight
Very good that he helped Melissa
But I'm not sure he shed all his own addictions. If he so easily reverted back into his role as self described pussy hound, what good would he be to anyone as a husband and father?
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