A great first time effort! Like the other poster said; good build up, and good story line. I had hoped the scene at the end would have been more detailed, but hopefully this is just part of the story. I look forward to reading more.
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Anonymous11/15/06
Very Good Story
It is the humiliation that will make this saga! How imaginative are you! How will she control you and make you her's.
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potentialy good story line
story was good for your first. lots of build up but the sex scene needs more detail and eroticism. u should continue with this story line though.
Good start
A great first time effort! Like the other poster said; good build up, and good story line. I had hoped the scene at the end would have been more detailed, but hopefully this is just part of the story. I look forward to reading more.
Very Good Story
It is the humiliation that will make this saga! How imaginative are you! How will she control you and make you her's.
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