All Comments on 'Under The Mistletoe'

I felt let down by the promise of the title, the concept, and the teasing bits of great writing trapped in a story that seemed rushed. Read more about my views on the New Story Review thread in the Author's Hangout of Lit Forums

It was ok, good for a qucik sex story.

that was great sweetie!

it was great writing but I am not realy happy with the "quick" sex story. add more sensory details...

Sad...

The story seemed to get off on the right foot but i was let down with how it went from there. I was not at all turned on. Sorry

You're intentions are good...and i can't say that u lack the skills to write, but u need a LOT of practice. Don't get me the wrong way, i can tell when someone has potential, but u are too young of a writter and too unexperienced yet...read some more books, get ya vocab in order and keep writting. ONE DAY U MIGHT CREATE A BEst SELLER, who knows...

It hit just right with me. It left a little to be imagined and you could feel this was more than just great sex.

How do we know what Kevin is thinking? He could be thinking he wants some anal, or a threesome. Instead we know what cologne, or home concocted cologne he wears and that he is "crazy in love".

It was the hallmark of erotica. It wasn't horrible, just not arousing unless you are a 15 yr old girl. Bring sexy back. hola!

I liked your story! I would have liked it more if it was a longer, though (especially the sex). Keep writing - I'll be reading.

give it up your writing is crap