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A Gray Area Ch. 05

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous11/23/06

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I love this story, please write more I can't wait to read further!

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by Anonymous11/01/08

How about using TOO ...

It is apparent that you don't have an editor or proofreader. You like to use too except that you only use one "o" instead of two! Anther glaring error is excepted instead of accepted which corroborates that you DO need an educated editor and/or proofreader. Story line is a little convoluted and very slow to build to any eroticism.

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