I enjoyed your story.
I have read many here. It is a common theme but that being said, worth reading. More eroticism would have made it excellent!
Thanks for writing
Sexmate
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Anonymous11/21/06
regulation story
You followed the formula, but forgot the spice.
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Anonymous11/23/06
why are your characters always drunk?
from one story to the next, your characters are always out with a whole bunch of girlfriends and always drunk!
I have to agree with Brother In-Law. I thought it could have even been true, as well. In any case, it was a good little tale. Give us more of your work and don't be discouraged by some "uptight ass".
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Anonymous01/08/12
beach house affair
excelent story hope you continue
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Anonymous08/13/13
glad he stopped writing
just to bad he posted five halfassed stories first. there was no background or character development in this story and there was no end. as siad by most this was totally rushed and nonerotic if he had used a good editor and learned to write first it could have been good but as is it sucks like 90% of the crap here.
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Anonymous05/14/14
"Glad he stopped"
Dude, you have some hostility and anger management issues! Prolly not many real writers here, just people who want to get shit out of their head and on paper.
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Anonymous06/06/16
Stuff like this can happen in real-life...
When I was about 18 or 19 my sister (who would've been therefore 20 or 21 at the time) caught me masturbating whilst I was looking at a gay porn mag. I was extremely embarrassed but strangely horny that it was my sister who'd caught me not my mother or father. She was confused, shocked, etc. but also turned on by it and said something like, "I didn't realise you had such a big cock; you could be in a porn mag yourself." And then she starts telling me (too much information!) that she hasn't been fucked in ages (she was between boyfriends at the time), that she's gagging for a good fuck, etc. all of which made me horny as I was thinking the same as her, i.e. I needed to be fucked hard too. She was almost begging me to fuck her, but I kept saying no to begin with. So we flicked through the mag together talking about all the different cocks, with her adding that it was a bit of waste that all those hot guys were sucking and fucking each other, instead of fucking a woman. In the end we were so horny and she kept pestering me that I half gave in: I grabbed a tube of KY from my bedside drawer and fucked her up the bum! And she loved it as much as I loved being fucked... the little slut! (That's a long time ago now and never been mentioned since!)
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Been there, read that. Only with much more eroticism.
Outstanding!
I think maybe this is true life--certainly sounds like it! Great story "keep it up"!
I enjoyed it!
I enjoyed your story.
I have read many here. It is a common theme but that being said, worth reading. More eroticism would have made it excellent!
Thanks for writing
Sexmate
regulation story
You followed the formula, but forgot the spice.
why are your characters always drunk?
from one story to the next, your characters are always out with a whole bunch of girlfriends and always drunk!
I would suspect that it didn't take you more than
an hour to write this story--I read another of your stories, it wasn't too bad except for a shit hole lick --
I started a second one and didn't make it past the middle
I started this one and found it boring--Simply a quick re-write of the others with an oversized dickey thrown in.
Your writing has posibilities but you need to do some work on them -- At least read them thru one before you submit them
Some folks are way up tight!
I have to agree with Brother In-Law. I thought it could have even been true, as well. In any case, it was a good little tale. Give us more of your work and don't be discouraged by some "uptight ass".
beach house affair
excelent story hope you continue
glad he stopped writing
just to bad he posted five halfassed stories first. there was no background or character development in this story and there was no end. as siad by most this was totally rushed and nonerotic if he had used a good editor and learned to write first it could have been good but as is it sucks like 90% of the crap here.
"Glad he stopped"
Dude, you have some hostility and anger management issues! Prolly not many real writers here, just people who want to get shit out of their head and on paper.
Stuff like this can happen in real-life...
When I was about 18 or 19 my sister (who would've been therefore 20 or 21 at the time) caught me masturbating whilst I was looking at a gay porn mag. I was extremely embarrassed but strangely horny that it was my sister who'd caught me not my mother or father. She was confused, shocked, etc. but also turned on by it and said something like, "I didn't realise you had such a big cock; you could be in a porn mag yourself." And then she starts telling me (too much information!) that she hasn't been fucked in ages (she was between boyfriends at the time), that she's gagging for a good fuck, etc. all of which made me horny as I was thinking the same as her, i.e. I needed to be fucked hard too. She was almost begging me to fuck her, but I kept saying no to begin with. So we flicked through the mag together talking about all the different cocks, with her adding that it was a bit of waste that all those hot guys were sucking and fucking each other, instead of fucking a woman. In the end we were so horny and she kept pestering me that I half gave in: I grabbed a tube of KY from my bedside drawer and fucked her up the bum! And she loved it as much as I loved being fucked... the little slut! (That's a long time ago now and never been mentioned since!)
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