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WOW!!!
This is one HOT story, PLEASE add more to this one!!!!
Paul
hot story but...
this was a hott story but alot of that was runied because as soon as i was getting into it there would be some grammer error and i'm stuck trying to figure out what its supposed to say.
also it kinda felt like the story was rushed a bit
good story but get and editor
My Grammar?
this was a hott (hot) story but alot of that was runied (ruined) because as soon as i (I) was getting (got) into it there would be some grammer (grammar) error and i'm ( I was) stuck trying to figure out what its (it was, although you meant it's) supposed to say.
also it kinda felt like the story was rushed a bit
good story but get and (an) editor
Uhmmmm, I have no qualms whatsoever in saying that I doubt that I'm the individual in need of an editor.
Followed The Story Just Fine-Very Good
I enjoyed your story Afoerotik. I've also written a few stories with interracial flavor. Love 'cums' in all colors.
How goes, it, 'My Grammar'?
Where does this non-existent word "alot" come from? I have 17 different English dictionaries in my house, including the twenty-one and a half thousand - page OED, and including two American dictionaries; in none of these does this specious word appear. Look before you leap, mate - or keep your mouth shut. Freddy
Very Hot
I, for one, had no problem with the grammar or anything else in this story! Very Hot!
Dee
Grammar Police
I often read comments referring to bad grammar on this site. Isn't it about the sex? Grammar never prevents me from getting wet or cumming! No one said this was high art.
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