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mmmmm yes you're right I love it
thank you for telling me about this one I do like it xoxox
HUH!?!?
Author's Question: Recently I received an anonymous feedback for this story saying the following:
"You must be stupid, stupid, stupid. Give it up pal,"
Whoever wrote it, if you look back at this story, please explain what your compaint is. Without constructive criticism, I can't become a better writer.
I like
I have a weakness for succubus stories, but for what it's worth I give it my thumbs up. There's nothing "stupid" about this story, so you (the author) should just ignore immature feedback.
Some legitimate criticism:
1) The ending IS rough (too abrupt)
2) There's some very bizzare switches between present and past tense occuring within the same paragraphs. Either talk in the present or the past, but please pick one :p
Amazing
That was great, and-again-don't listen to the jerks who say random shit
Whooo!
Hot Hot Hot!!
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