All Comments on 'You skip to Dessert'

lovely imagery and quite fun to read

Mentioned in today's new poem reviews

could be me, sorry I missed the ride, I'll hedge my bet here with a 5. You have seem to have some nice things going on, but I'm not getting where they came from, or where they are going. As I said, could be me.

When I ran out of wares

I melted the sand into glass

sun spark prisms pot of gold.

When I cashed in the gold,

"Of Jewels and Horses!"

"For God, Mammon and Country!"

"From Barnes and Noble!"

in Xanadu you bought me dates

the black abada type

that grow only in dry creek beds

with the promise of winter water

crashing down in sudden floods

to a land thankful for the monsoon passion

as for all the rest, the hot tea and cardomom

I was always up for something new

my problem was that I could not skate

and i looked ridiculous in pink leg warmers

I've come back to this poem several times over the last few days. It's sinking in, now. :) Not sure what's sinking in, but I'm seeing some images. I really hate to like a poem and not be sure why. Darn, what a difficult poem to comment on.

I enjoy the hell out of writing where the journey is more important than the destination. This is one hell of a journey. Makes you want to scream 'From Barnes and Noble'

ty,BD

5

I enjoyed the construction of this and, as ever, the voice.