Incisive

I know

exactly what you mean.

ironic
insightful and
incisively inciteful ;)

This Poem

mentioned on today's review

as I read this

I was thinking how exactly incisive this was, soft hugs to you hon.

WONDERFUL!

Dead on...!

Incision Excision

Love the idea as a comment - great observation but not a great poem. Reads better without the last 9 lines ?

Exactly

what i'm sayin', ya know? Great read thanks for sharing
TT

Interresting...

...the way you clash
presicion
in form and content
with intent
of impresicion.

Intentional,
or an indent
in the insicion?

Man!

There will ALWAYS be a kind woman who will give you some soft hugs if you tell her that you have an open bleeding wound!
But what I like is that I found myself doing the movements that rappers do before this ended -you got me by the rhythm!
p.s. are you saying that you posted it in one flow - no changes - no breaks for thought- like automatic writing?

tongue tied me

~

Good line about revision, "moments of heart and hurt are not about revision" but I still feel like I want to revise this poem a little. :)