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The Mistake

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by Unbridled_Passion11/20/06

I hope...

that this mistake doesn't cause another...if you know what I mean!

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by KOLKORE04/18/07

More mistakes of the carnal kind…

The way you said at the end: “our incredible mistake”, it reminds me of people saying ‘you are baaad…’, meaning the exact opposite. If you meant it for real, I did not see any real dread. Otherwise, I liked it when you dared to use original imagery (“the kiss was carnal”), but I want to encourage you to use more of that kind of imagery, maybe less generalized language.

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by Anonymous07/26/11

The Best

The Best poem I have read on this site. A little late to have full impact; as original thought this is award territory. The credit can only be understated.

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