This seems to be a continuation/conclusion to Till We Meet Again with the name changes it's confusing. In that context I liked it. Not your best but an interesting story.
The story is, in effect, a continuation of Till We Meet Again. Both are expanded scenes from my second novel. Oh, that I'd thought to use the same names in both stories. Next time I'll check with you first.
Thanks for the feedback.
Excellent well written story. But, it reads as if there was a chapter before this one; and, perhaps one to follow. Quite a good read though.
and well done, Rumple!
This was an energetic vignette with interesting characters. I could see the fight happening very clearly in my head.
I'd like to see a continuation of this premise, or a prequel to it :)
Anger and justice served oozed out of the screen. ~Minx
I thought this had a ring of familiarity to it... Till We Meet Again! :) I always like your characters, Rumply, they're so real. Great job, good luck!
...seen too many of those, very well written Rump... wrapped into a christmas tail
well written, very interesting... i found it a bit confusing at first, but if it is a continuation of another text, that would explain that...
But well written. Beautiful imagery. But mostly it's a story I can relate too. WTGO :)
But Till We Meet Again is a tough act to follow. This story might appeal to a more limited audience?
This was a nice twist to an old story line. Liked it a lot; social values and all.
I just wish there had been more of it.
I'm confused while this is a great story why is it in this category?
YOU LACK WRITING SKILLS AS THIS WAS SO NOT ENTERTAINING
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