The Writer manages to lovingly relate scenes from the past as they reminisce about days now gone. A sweet endearing story well told. Enjoyable Read! Lovingly Written!
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Anonymous11/25/06
beautiful
Such vivid imagery!! I can still taste those soggy mittens with the ice balls hanging from them. Wonderful (and sad) emotions evoked, too. Leonard Cohen's lyrics are very artfully woven into this evocative tale.
Goosebumps. Bona fide. Tears, too. Damn. I, as always, stand in awe of your talent. I can still taste wet mittens, feel the wool, see the sparkling diamonds in the snow... you are such a gift to this site and I feel so blessed to have read this here and now. Thank you, Muse.
I am somewhat embarrassed to admit to a 'huh?' moment at the end. As in, "Huh? Who the hell is Leonard?" I figured out that you were referring to Leonard Cohen upon reading another PC, but I still don't know who that is. (Names are NOT my forte.)
English
You're the best
As always, quality, feeling and emotion in just a few words.
Good luck, you have a strong entry.
beautiful
The way you evoke images, memory, emotion ... it astounds me every time.
Very Sweet
You can reaaly feel the deep love and sadness of the characters. Great submission.
Days remembered!
The Writer manages to lovingly relate scenes from the past as they reminisce about days now gone. A sweet endearing story well told. Enjoyable Read! Lovingly Written!
beautiful
Such vivid imagery!! I can still taste those soggy mittens with the ice balls hanging from them. Wonderful (and sad) emotions evoked, too. Leonard Cohen's lyrics are very artfully woven into this evocative tale.
Thanks so much.
An evocative rendition...
of lovers' parting. Heartbreaking, yet tender in it's deceptive simplicity. A fine piece of writing! Good luck in the contest.
*sigh*
Everything feels so syrupy-thick, diffused and in slow motion after reading this.
Like a surreal painting
These kinds of gorgeous, poetic descriptions remind me of how much I still have to learn about writing erotica. This is a masterpiece.
No one word...
I can't think of anyone word...but it's a rememberer. A story that you'll always remember for it's evocativeness. Beautifully done
Musie!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Goosebumps. Bona fide. Tears, too. Damn. I, as always, stand in awe of your talent. I can still taste wet mittens, feel the wool, see the sparkling diamonds in the snow... you are such a gift to this site and I feel so blessed to have read this here and now. Thank you, Muse.
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Lovely imagery. Excellent show of emotion.
I am somewhat embarrassed to admit to a 'huh?' moment at the end. As in, "Huh? Who the hell is Leonard?" I figured out that you were referring to Leonard Cohen upon reading another PC, but I still don't know who that is. (Names are NOT my forte.)
Good luck in the contest! ~Minx
PS. You now have one more unsweepable 5 bomb. ;)
mind boggling.....
a life-changing story, if ever there was one! Colly would be proud of you!
Two-times a winner
Even if the overall writing didn't rate a five, though it does, coming up with "well-love-to-lumpy" would have more than earned you a fiver.
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