- All
Comments (7) - Add a
Comment - Send
Feedback Send private anonymous feedback to the author (click here to post a public comment instead).
| Literotica Toy Store ADULT TOY & DVD STORE FAST & DISCREET |
Literotica XXX Webcams 24/7 LIVE CAMS - FREE PREVIEW W/AUDIO! |
Literotica Adult Movies STREAMING ADULT MOVIES PAY PER MINUTE |
English
~
Move "after the night of the crash the armadillos slept easy" to the top, delete everything else, then write from there. It would make a good beginning for the poem. Then tell the story of what crashed, but leave out the nonsense and ass munchkins. Or you could have just sent the poem to Art in the first place and skipped submitting it, saving yourself from having to read my feedback. :)
why so pugnacious?
You and tale/tell/ trail (?) and jim and that thread. i know, I lurk, I read. Disappointed that you waste your talent o n trifling shist, jabs and punches at people who dont matter in your own grand scheme.
overall, not a bad poem. I agree with eve, move the last 2 lines.
*polly*
Trails yet to be taken!
Lovely little poem - and it's comforting to know 'after the night of the crash the armadillos slept easy.' Brilliantly written! Enjoyable Read!
end of the trail?
happy 'trails' to you... (~_~)
end of the trail?
Probably not.
self publishing is easier today
At least today you can publish on demand and same the space on the shelf for the copies. I like the way the armadillos are glad when it all crashes.
I knew you would love that line
Eve, being one of the few here that would catch the deep significance of armadillos. 217 has signicance also, being the number of marshmellows consumed, around the ol' book burning fire. Now this one is a tricky poem, very easy to misread, here goes, two lines, you need a degree to understand it/Armadil?os/Racemates?/Nah, you can just google Racemates.
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to end of the trail or
More submissions by MyNecroticSnail.