All These Years

This isn't a story ...

... it's not even a chapter ... at best it's a scene ... and by itself, utterly pointless.

I choose not to vote, rather than drag your rating down, as you can certainly write. It's a shame that you chose not to write this fully. Ah well ...

reality

sometimes we just don't see what's in front of us

Superb

5*

I think that he was the biggest

pussy I ever read about and she was just another stupid cunt. Formulaic and inane. If she was so unhappy and couldn't bring herself to talk to her husband about it I see two choices and both are good from his stand point. Kill herself or get a divorce and leave him alone. Maybe she will still try to "find" herself on the end of a dick, but at least it will be on her own time. And that little passive/aggressive mini smirk when he complained about the food, maybe he should help her kill herself.

Not sure if people realize but your supposed to read this AFTER hearing the song then kinda merge the two together into a mental montage.

Slow clap. It really was beautiful, expect at the end saying it was us which gives a direction that he forgave her. Would have been better if it was a fork in the road.

5 stars.

why not Selena

You say that love just doesn't disappear. It sure as shit wasnt there when she fucked another man in the marital bed. Love can happen at first sight. To me, it can disappear at first sight also. You can follow that asshole right out the door slut.

credit where credit is due

It is well written and thought provoking.

Not sure.

I thought your twenty tips for a good editor was excellent so I read this. i have to say I found this disjointed and difficult to read.

yuk

You have a skewed definition of "love". Putrid and foul is all I can say. Get some counseling

A snapshot

Your account of a betrayal throwing a couple out of their comfort zone and clinging to their time worn environment was well done. A snapshot does not tell the story of what the water quality in the fishbowl will entail going forward. A person once said, " trust is something cautiously given, takes a second to destroy and a lifetime to rebuild if at all", I see what you were going for in this snapshot and found it thought provoking and well written yet miles away from the closure we all come to expect from a story. In my humble opinion, that is what made this story interesting.

No closure

3 but it really should be a 2.

This story is like the little boy who shot the arrow in the air and it landed he knew not where. What's the point? He's a wimp and she's the 'modern' bitch, only being complete once she Fuck's another guy. Then what?

As you left it, who really cares? They don't.

On second thought, 2 would have been better.

crap

no pun intended this is pure shit

So sorry.

After reading your piece on how to appreciate a man, I started reading this with anticipation. Sadly, this story casts a huge shadow over both. Your heart is empty, and you missed the point.

Different

He knew he failed her.
She knew she failed him.
So sad.
Beautifully written.

SK. You should not care for mr. Anon's comment, just another insecure oversensitive guy.

I guess...

You drove off the road...and you got stuck in the muddy ditch.?.?.? ● RIGHT ●

First damn story too ! ! ! I'll try one more story but I'm scared. I don't want any of your nuttiness to rub off on me.......bill

Lol, sry.....1 for shock value

Damn good start ! ! ●THOUGH●

Excellent story, a 5* read

Can't think why I missed it in the first place.

It tells a powerful story in a plausible and believable way.

Eliciting a moving, emotional response....

... is, I think, the point of 'ART" Is it not?
I have been thinking of a story very much like this for quite a while... perhaps I'd read this years ago and forgot?
This story IS that emotional/spiritual/physical response, by the characters, which defines 'drama' man v man, man v himself, etc.
The ability to show this struggle in the manner that this was done is great! I want MORE though.... this should have been much longer. NOT to give any MORE of the timeline necessarily, but to explore more of the feelings each of the characters as they deal with their failures, and the failure of their spouse.
Great job!

sorry hated it

KICK THE SLUT OUT!!!

Well written, but......

You did great in expressing the emotions. You took us high, then low. We went to the precipice, we looked up, the down. Then you left us there. This was a great set up, but not a story.

Gave it a four...

I appreciate the author trying to write that both people play a part in a relationship good or bad it always takes two, blame is shared as well as praise. I think the reactions of the couple were not based in reality. The deeper the love the stronger the reaction that's just a plain fact. Believe me the last thing you want to do to the woman you have loved for many years is touch her in any way if you saw what he saw and the absence of reaction from her tells us she didn't love him any more, hell the fact she is in her marital bed with another man screams just that fact! In the beginning the author States that the background doesn't matter but it does if they met and married quickly I would expect this scene later in life. Marriage isn't respected anymore most end in divorce because the couple fall for the burning hot flames of new love but, lol there's always a but, it is when those flames burn out and grow cold that will tell if 20 yrs later you will make it. The old Celtic saying is something like:Long after the burning flames of new love turn to embers may you find you have married your best friend. great saying if I do say so my self. All relationships start great but in a 20 yr relationship you have to work at keeping the fires going and it can't compete with the excitement of a new one. I'm rambling sorry I enjoyed this story it was very well written I just think it was lacking a little in realistic reactions from both who claim to love each other. Sleeping with another in your marital bed is never the correct action in any situation. And if you are having identity issues choosing to become a cheating spouse doesn't seem like an intelligent choice to find yourself. lol thanx for the read!

HELL NO!

THERE IS NO EXCUSE FOR WHAT SHE DID!!! It might have helped if she DEMANDED to be heard if the dumb assed hubby wasn't listening. If he still didn't listen then divorce his ASS. NOW SHE IS ONLY A SKANK SLUT. she deserves the street naked with ABSOLUTELY NOTHING!

Damn

Cheating cunt got away with it.

no rating

Interesting

I guess different people react differently. Some can stand to eat shit and others cannot. When a man finds out his wife does not love him, and by definition a cheating wife does not love her husband, there is nothing left except his own self respect, and that must be preserved at all costs. If he does not stay loyal to himself when no one else is, then he has betrayed himself! What is left for such a man? No one loves him enough to care about his well being, not even himself. That man is one step away from suicide. So, rise up, and fight. Attack and beat the shit out of both of them. Then make sure she knows that the next move is up to her. She can tell the police what happened, or she can tell the police that her husband caught the other man beating and raping her and he interceded. Their future is her choice. After he spends a year or so in jail, they will be bankrupt and in the poorhouse.

Comments

The best and simplest is to leave her and divorce the skank in the fastest time possible,killing,beating up is just good to end up in jail and let the shit last longer

Stinks

The wife didn't act responsibility and he needs to move on. Kick her to the curb, it does not make any difference why she did it. She stepped over the line.

Rubbish

Absolute rubbish, grammar was good, does that count? Nope didn't think so. There is reconciliation and then there is RAAC. But this one didn't even do that. I'm sorry but no rating from me on this one...

OMG

now that hit me right where it hurts the most, an I love it, thank u so much it means a lot to me, now I want... no... I need what Jim an Molly have all of it, the good, sad, bad an mad times of it, only I am unable to do so, even worse don't know how, but I would allow my Goddess to have as many lovers as she wishes, as long as I can play with both them too. Rated A HEART WARMING 5 Stars

I was looking for a story not a paragraph wasted my time shim sorry but could have been longer

so

I guess the idea is wife can seek out lover bring him into marital bed knowing husband will be coming home and find her.
He did not arrive that early as indicated by kitchen alarm going off signaling his usual arrival time
Story lacking something

WHAT A LET DOWN

She-it man! I read this shite hoping to B.T.B. Hell nothing, nada, zip, fuck all. Fuck this story?

What the fuck!

A wife instead of talking to her husband, instead of working on their marriage, decides for a year to have a premeditated, year of lying, disrespect, dishonour betrayal.

A cheating cunt with no remorse.. even when "explaining" why, treats him with contempt, that he should be keeping up better.

Then a pussy wimp of a husband just saying oh well.. life goes on, or some such bullshite

What a fucking cunt and a prat IT is married to.

At least this piece of crap was very short.

I've been here!!

I'm sorry if you are going through this, nut I have been here. Didn't get back with my ex and didn't catch him in bed exactly but I've been here. I now have a love that is more than the one that felt like it killed me, this one has my soul and I love what you did with this song! I've heard it and it made me cry for what might have been. Please keep writing!!

I've Been Where He Is

I have fallen from 30 feet. It is a miracle that I suffered only a few broken bones and a punctured lung. I have survived being stabbed numerous times. I have even been shot in the palm of my left hand. But none of these injures come close to the pain I felt when I came home three days early from the military and found my wife in bed underneath a total stranger. Just thinking about it brings the pain back, and that was several years ago. I would not presume to tell the husband how he should have handled it. As for me, it should have been a natural reaction. After all, I had the training. I should have killed them both. I still don't know why I didn't.

In Shock

He is still in shock. When that wears off, he needs to throw her out. This crap about losing herself, and him not being there for her. Blah, blah, blah. He works hard to give his family a better life. She takes the money and uses it to meet men at these stupid classes. She is one of the worst cheating wives portrayed on this site. Snap out of it and show her the door

just another unfinished story-- 1 star