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Lousy
It needs some work
Bad writing all around. I couldn't get past the extreme gramatical errors to actually read it. Perhaps you could fix the problems (conversations, quotations marks, other punctuation, etc) and make it readable. Basic grammar counts for a lot, even in erotica. If we can read it, we can't enjoy it.
Not Too Bad !!!!!
Funny I began reading this and it brought me back to a time I thought I had forgotten. I was taking in a way not very different from this story.
I can still recall my rapist's cock in my ass and mouth,thanks your story made me cum very hard.
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