All Comments on 'Anal Little Sister Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
basic math

I think with some work this could be good but I couldn't get over the math problem. I'm 32 and 9 years older than my sister. How old am I? 23? Nope you list the sister as 21. I don't know why that bugged me but it did. A few spelling things too but I think it will develop nicely.

sexysmilesexysmilealmost 16 years ago
Good first submission

I agree that it needs some editing. It also moves very quickly, but it is fantasy, so why not? I will continue reading this series.

DryhillDryhillalmost 14 years ago
I AGREE

the maths does not add up and did bug me a bit, but overall i thought this as agood start to an ongoing story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago

21+9 years older doesn't equal 32

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Fake

32 - 9 is 21 now? Were this real, you would have Kniwn your own sisters age

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago

Clearly written by a male and not very well I'm afraid...

Wendywants2BtakenWendywants2Btakenover 1 year ago

Lucious story baby, love the details ❤️❤️

AnonymousAnonymous11 months ago

Pathetic attempt. Give it up.

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