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too long
Break it up next time
A bit long, but never boring!!!
Yes, it was a bit long, and yes I also did a double take when I saw that it was 28 pages long, but the pages went by in a blink!!! The only thing I could have wished for were auto-scrolling/flipping pages so that I didn't have to take my fingers out of my pussy!!
It was very well written and the characters are all really great - especially Cori!!! I'm a little apprehensive about the weekly party at John's place b/c I would hate for this story to become a typical slut-loves-cocks story... The boys' genuine concern for Cori's well-being adds so much and makes this story special!!
A bit long, but never boring!!!
Yes, it was a bit long, and yes I also did a double take when I saw that it was 28 pages long, but the pages went by in a blink!!! The only thing I could have wished for were auto-scrolling/flipping pages so that I didn't have to take my fingers out of my pussy!!
It was very well written and the characters are all really great - especially Cori!!! I'm a little apprehensive about the weekly party at John's place b/c I would hate for this story to become a typical slut-loves-cocks story... The boys' genuine concern for Cori's well-being adds so much and makes this story special!!
long but good
but where was she ever reluctant or non consensual? Otherwise it was very entertaining. It is a lot of reading at one time though.
Hot and Simple
Hot and Simple is why the story is good. Wish I had wrote it, I would have added some humor, maybe made it a first person story from the female point of view and left off the BSDM that started around page 26 or so.
Hot and Well Described
A good, if very long story. I like that she dressed the part of eye-candy. The outfits made it better
Resubmit as 10 part series.
This is too good to get lost like this! This is one of the best & hottest stories out there. But without the availability of posting it several times as part of a series, it will be lost in the shuffle. I suggest cutting, pasting, and resubmitting as a 10 parter. In any case I've got off about 4 times so far and I'm not even half way thru. Great stuff!
More than 10 part series
Not only should this get broken up into 10 parts, but the story isn't finished yet. We have something going down Saturday, and what does Mr. Holman do to her? Also who becomes the new tech, and how does he want to use her.
Great Story
Great Story, and who cares if it's broken up into sections? If you don't want to read it all at once, don't..You don't need chapters to tell you when you can stop.
I am a little curious about why this is in the non-consent/reluctance area though......
Great outfits, sweet story.
This is definitely sitting around the top online stories I've come across. The nonconsent categorization is off the mark, and I feel spoiled getting the whole story in one take. I hope you continue this or start up another story. Putting the babe in an office setting could be nice: half naked chick getting fucked by suits..., or in a restaurant. Judging by this read, I'm probably going to like anything you crank out, though. Thanks.
Excellent story!
Great story, I'm looking forward to more, particularly how the Holman plot-line works out. I'd also like to read about Cori's "advertising" job for the Body Shop (I've seen those autoshows).
Like a few other readers, I was surprised when the story took a slightly rough turn, especially because I thought that at the beginning you were taking alot of trouble to reassure the reader that it was all consenual and she wouldn't be hurt. I thought that these reassurances were intrusive to the narrative, and you should just let the fantasy run.
I don't understand...
I don't understand why you are not published and you don't have a multi-million dollar book contract. I love this story! It had everything! Sex, friendship, trust, and SEX!!! You are awesome! Perfect 10!
Boring for NonConsent
Boring for this category but good for another category like Romance or Erotic Coupling etc....
Amazing!
I'm savoring this one, just reading a little at a time.
Thank you!
Thanks! Glad you like it!
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