I don't usually comment, but your story had my attention right from the beginning. Beautifully, descriptively written that clearly conveyed your emotions throughout. What a beautiful way to start a relationship with such openess and honesty, not to mention the absolute lust you had for each other! You've got take us to the next chapter.
Hi. I loved your story. It was finely crafted from the beginning to the end. And the end, with the post-coital conversation was the icing on the cake. All too often the stories on Lit. end too abruptly. It was nice to see the characters act like real people.
One thing I did find distracting -- wouldn't Debbie be concerned about tuna fish breath?
This is your second story that I've read and enjoyed. As mentioned in other feedback, this hints at a 2nd chapter - shoot me a message if you get round to writing and posting it. You have a fan.
English
Fantastic story
Such a naughty naughty mind
Loved It!
I don't usually comment, but your story had my attention right from the beginning. Beautifully, descriptively written that clearly conveyed your emotions throughout. What a beautiful way to start a relationship with such openess and honesty, not to mention the absolute lust you had for each other! You've got take us to the next chapter.
Altoids?
Hi. I loved your story. It was finely crafted from the beginning to the end. And the end, with the post-coital conversation was the icing on the cake. All too often the stories on Lit. end too abruptly. It was nice to see the characters act like real people.
One thing I did find distracting -- wouldn't Debbie be concerned about tuna fish breath?
next please...
This is your second story that I've read and enjoyed. As mentioned in other feedback, this hints at a 2nd chapter - shoot me a message if you get round to writing and posting it. You have a fan.
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