All Comments on 'Wedding Night'

Please don't jump from third person to first and work on your grammer.

Story needs a lot of work.

The grammar definitely needs work. And the first person to third person transition is a bit much. I do like how you switched from the bride's POV to the groom's POV. But make sure the entire story is either in first or third-person POV; otherwise, it's confusing. Good work, otherwise.