All Comments on 'Car Accidents Aren't so Bad'

Wonderful prose piece with the sort of surprise ending that I especially like;

A piece this good deserves some better editing:

Punctuation and word usage need be flawless,

Poetry's less forgiving than short stories. I sense you can put out a more polished product ~ you've already got the requisite imagination!

This little rendering at first appears grim and foreboding. At the end the surprise is delightful. I love a happy ending.

Despite the seemingly cruel, chancy aspects of our lives when we triumph, I believe it belongs to us. It comes across in your story. It reminds me of a recent film, (I believe it was “Accidents”, but I am not sure). It explores a similar concept. Namely, life contains daily unpredictable coincidences, many of which carry life transforming power over us. They can also expose the ugliest as well as the noblest sides of us. The existence of some could not have been suspected up to that moment (including the exposed person). Those transformations come especially as a result of the random interactions between people (some are called accidents).

Interestingly, the film, which exposed a lot of human hypocrisy; hate and frailty, also showed optimism; strength and compassion. One of the latter positive developments was also an outcome of a terrible car accident…

Regarding the writing style, I agree with the comment of Le Broz It’s more of a prose, where the sentences are broken between the lines. But I mention it only to convey that whatever section your submission appears on, it does not make much of a difference to me.

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