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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous11/02/07

Un-announced shit hole play always brings --------

the lowest possible scores from me===Would have been a 5 otherwise

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by Anonymous11/02/07

Rushed

Seems a bit rushed, grammatically. Too many errors, particularly in proper dialogue format. Keep reading other stories on here and work on emulating proper format. Until the grammar is correct in a story, the action can be as hot as anything and most readers can't enjoy it. Believe it or not! You would think with 50 million porn stories on here we're all just trying to get our reader rocks off but that just isn't the case.

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