All Comments on 'The Mentor Ch. 01'

Too much fat. Not enough meat.

Two pages long and no action? We read more about clothing designers, "second tier firms", and teachers' conferences than we did sex.

Your dialogue is good, but the rest is a waste of time.

I hope you read the note at the beginning of the story that included the words, "It sets the stage for things to come." If you don't want all the background and want to cut right to the sex, that's your choice. But I did try to warn people upfront. Glad you appreciated the dialogue, at least ;)

Bob A.

even though a trifle slower/longer than necessary/possible.

Let's see where it goes!