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by vampiredust12/28/06

Imaginative

Some great imagery to behold, loved the lines

'a mass worm hole suicide
disguised and smiling while
eating chocolate cyanide'

delicious atmosphere, mentioned in today's new poem reviews

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by LeBroz12/28/06

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Here we have more a dark hole than a worm hole,
Or better yet, a black hole of depression
Where life gets sucked down into oblivion;
And what's better is it's not obvious until it's too late.

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by RhymeFairy12/29/06

Very dark, but gooood read ~

I love the imagery and wording here.

Leon is right, the flow is smooth as silk,
one would never notice till the end
they are being cut to ribbons~

I love it !!!

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