Help please! I can't find the minus 100 vote button on this submission which I think is a fair vote
You are putting all the cheating wife/wimp stories to shame. Put it to reality, this is just as believable as most of the stupid stories printed.
Very well done!
you forgot to mention he was a trained navy SEAL and when his mind became straight he would have killed all of them. Never Air Force PJs nor army Special Ops, just Navy guys, grins.
Actually not a bad future for real cheating wives, kids used as food, them going and getting paid as prostitutes instead of being unpaid amateurs.
Good idea to trash many of the standard Loving Wives stories. I actually thought it was a real story at first instead of a spoff.
Author, that's fuckingly good! it's actually better than SNL lampooning itself.
Now, that's deep!
You've (via the Brucy, Johnny, and Mary characters and their "intelligences") "captured" and summarized about 98 percent of the "Loving Wives" stories here, past, present, and future. And you did it last than one Lit. page!!!
Reminded me of the stories submitted by wantwhitewoman, craig88 and mrbaddaddy with all the usual shit and wrong spellings, grammars, tenses, structure of sentences, etc.etc.
has got the Loving Wives writers down pat. I always click on to them. As soon as they start off with the words, " I have
always wanted to see my wife get fucked by another.....bla..bla." The so called writers must all be a bunch of immature children. The site has no way of screening out underaged brats.
They have ruined a good section. "Loving Wives" used to be a sexy story section. I think the BDSM crowd that controls the site are writing the stories and trying to obliterate it by making them so bad that no one wants to write in LW anymore. Good show Quutoo.
if you truly believe this i feel sorry for you. you need some serious help. i know this was suppose to be humor (i didn't find it funny at all) and satire (where is the satire of a guy getting fucked over by his wife, boss and kids)i was charitable with giving it a zero
This is a piece of shit!!!!!!!
mistress for years she is already a prosititute. Yeah some of this was funny but mostly very poor writing. Take the following: "Oh yes John you funk me period. All that creep does is to cum in my cut hair". What the hell is funking or did you mean fucking and were wanking so bad you couldnt hit the right keys? "Cum in my cut hair", well yes if you trimmed or shaved it but then I think you meant cunt hair. I am very sorry to see how excited you were. It means you really have a very unhappy and sheltered life.
“cum in my cut hair” ? Was this during or after the cut and perm? At least you got the category right, this definitely belongs in humor & satire because your attempt at writing a story really made me laugh
I've never put down a writer as I'm not comfortable to write myself! But I'm left wondering......... Is English your 5th language? My 6yr old could write a better story! Piss off until you can write in English, it's a dissapoinent to start a story then find out I have wasted 5mins of my life, I can't get those 5mins back you know! If I could sue you for those 5 mins, I would!!!!!!
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