All Comments on 'Zara's First Time'

It was sexy, but there were two big problems for me.

First, the setup was not credible. Why would a virgin just decide to toss it aside over a stranger? And how could she be that (apparently) experienced?

Second, the run-on sentences drove me nuts. Some paragraphs were five sentences strung together by commas. I know, someone will flame me for commenting on that, but geez! Pay attention to writing technique!

in reply to anonymous from Tampa, FL.

thanks for commenting, but as many of the writes on this website, i an no where near an educated writer, i don't have any qualifications in writing, and yeah i may not be best at making sentances look right.

my intention is not o be the most published writer in the world, all i want to do is share my erotic mind with others so they can enjoy

and forget all the tittle tattle by others... I loved the story... it had romantic scenes, sexy descriptions...and very yummy moments.

I loved the story

A dreamers dream. Liked the fantasy. Held my attention. Thanks