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The words crude, rude, & vulgar come to mind; something more appropos to some creative writing on mens' room walls; this borders on rape fantasy, taking the view that she asked for it with her coy & teasing ways. As for the mechanics of the piece, better than some, rhymes well, rhythm seems fairly good as well; the mechanics are what got it at least a comment.
High hopes?
And other fantasies.
you should not write
First you dont know how to write. second you are you also totally dishonest. I noticed that you took out Kolkore because he gave you only two! You keep only the people who will sing to you that you are wonderful. I am sorry for you.
My comment is still there, this one is pretty good
Anon got confused with the other poem and last I checked my comment was still there. So, I think an apology is in order.
Regarding the poem, it’s sure is hot. My only qualm is, why the need to add a put down to the woman? It would have worked just as well with out turning her into a cheater. What’s the underlying message? all women are sluts, or should be treated as such?
Without the 'degrading factor'it would have been a top rating for me.
Good Job
Don't understand why the negative comment. This is just a well written nice dirty pornographic poem. It rhymes well and portrays a nice sexy experience with more to come. What the hell are you readers looking for?
Hell yes I would
Most awesome. Im pulsating.
AWESOME
Im so horny right now I really want to suckbsome cock and have my mouth and pussy fucked good!!!
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