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Girl in a Bar

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by Anonymous

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by LeBroz01/31/07

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A tale of the one that got away ~ maybe.

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by LeBroz01/31/07

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This poem was mentioned in Wednesday's New Poems Reviews.


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by Amyfriend01/31/07

Potential bi-sexual encounter...

twarted at the last second...maybe better luck next time.

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by duddle14601/31/07

Prrvocative

Sensuous illustration enhances this erotic Masterpiece.

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by h1s4k005/14/08

100% - Loved it


Goodness, My Dear

What beautiful art

You certainly know

How to tease a girl's heart


Your dialogue is nice

And you rhyme so well

Fitting words perfectly

As your characters tell


The story is sublime

The flow - no flaw

With seducitive imagery

My mind an awe

To have read on this meeting
To have placed myself there
Become that petted female
Who instead has black hair

A body just as wanting
My signs tell the same
But instead of walking away
I'd stay for the game

I must say I'm jealous
In this reading chance
Instead of joining you
In your bisexual romance

"Next time" you say
As I'm cupping my chin
"Next time we shall
Allow the flames out, within"

And if we do meet
Oh heavin forbid
For thoughts about you
My mind can not rid

Our tantilizing touches
Your sensational scent
My whispering whimpers
In a dictating descent

I'll tell you of your beauty
What I see through my eyes
Of savory details
You won't receive from guys

Soft touches on your skin
Gentle kisses on your lips
A body just as turned on
Without the male bump to your hips

A smooth mound, as yours
No crotch to protrude
To prod at your treasure
Like a guys crotch so rude

I'd caress your body
Find those sweet spots
And work them just right
So you get the hots

Then tease you a bit
As your eyes start a glow
And nipples do harden
Your nipping does show

Two fingers firmly placed
Aside the hardening bits
As my hands also cup
The under of your tits

Massaging so careful
Watching with intent
The expressoins you make
To their fullest extent

Reaching a moment
When pleasure is high
I'll slide up a hand
Against your thigh

Tease at your panties
Or even lack of
Tracing my fingers
Still watching above

As your breath quickens
Chest rises and falls
Then give you support
Lean you against the walls

A decent I begin
But along the way
I give a playful tap
It is time to play

But if you wish to read more
I await your reply
Goodnight my, Darling
A kiss and goodbye

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by h1s4k005/14/08

In regards to my "100% - Loved it!"


That was a rather rough copy of that poem, so sorry. I've submitted the final edition, along with audio ^_~ to Literotica. Hopefully within 3 days the submission will be accepted. If you'd like to read/hear it then, you know how to find me :)

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by tazz31701/21/12

A LEZ" PICK-UP

with a stranger. TK U MLJ LV NV

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