Very well written once again. A few inconsistencies but mostly hangs together. Interesting to hear this point of view. But we don't find out anything about the contacts with Eric where she warns/tells him, the attempts to phone him (which he rebuffs), and so forth. I guess another chapter is needed for Mary to tell us some more . . . By the way, this is just a story/fantasy/fairytale, but don't ever leave someone tied up and gagged, not even for a little while. It's extremely dangerous. One question: OK, I understand Mary is angry that it appears Irene (her "friend") is going to carry Phil's child, the child that should have been hers, but how did she ever get the courage to fight with/split from Phil, her "master" who heaps humiliation on her and she gets off on it ("I finally came when he pissed on my face . . . ")?
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Anonymous01/24/07
Evil
Truly evil. I cringed when I read this. Mary needs help. Fast. She's very unbalanced and has no redeeming qualities. She uses her friend, knowing her husband is on the make and then calls her a slut. And she takes revenge on her. Irene and Eric should have runned from this poisonous couple. Evil bets evil.
enjoying a very interesting story, and BAM!! I don't have a clue any more. This was off the wall strange. I'm not sure if I even want to read a part 7, if this is the direction the story is going to go. I did not care for this chapter at all.
by
Anonymous01/24/07
why you keep teasing with this story
it would be a good story if you stop fucking around with it.write the dam story and get it over with.like you enjoy yourself talking.
by
Anonymous01/24/07
of the characters Mary is probably the only
one that knows who they are and what they are doing. Phil is a prime asshole, nothing more, nothing less, just a piece of nothing meat. Eric is a love sick fool, who may grow up this time, maybe. Irene is simply and purely a pure slut. Betraying her best friend, betraying her husband, and finally betraying herself, and has been. In all likelyhood Mary will eliminate Phil, after all the worm does turn. And Eric needs to grow up and throw out the trash. Maybe Eric would be better off getting a boyfriend, he has no idea how to pick girls.
by
Anonymous01/24/07
Reading your story...
...makes me long to be around sane people, and authors. You took longer to say, "Phil tied me up and made me watch while he and Irene did it by the pool," than I could have imagined. It became rather boring after about 45 seconds and left me wanting to get on with my life and forget about the story. Stringing the reader along is not always a good thing, as in this case.
You earnrd it with the quality of your writing. This is a very well written story! It gives me hope that my English will one day be as good as yours. I do find the situation with Mary and Phil to be a bit forced, but it does force the story where you want it to go. I love the depth of your characters and the humanity they show.
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Anonymous01/24/07
Like a Onion
This story is like a Onion, peel away one layer and another surfaces! Keep it going, but please keep in mind that its a story in parts, so don't make it to difficult to read with some pauses in between.
Thanks for writing!
by
Anonymous01/24/07
how is the Author going to FUCK over Eric again?
sorry this chapter added nothing to the story.
In chapter 7 ERIC gets ganged raped by Klingons women....
I am STILL waiting for an RATIONAL explanation as to why ERIC got beaten almost to the point od death by Eliene's "friends" at the end of Chapter 3
why after all Eilene had put ERIC through would a smart guy like ERIC (who at that point in teh story has FULL knowledge of Eliene' lies and whoring) simply walk away with a large black Man and get beaten in an alley?
oh thats right!!! ERIC is a white straight DECENT man that believes is Love maariage and responsibility... and therefore is of course the ENEMY of the gay movement..................
Irene is a goddam whore as was ERIC's his previous wife... and Mary is a cowards .. the only perosn in these chapter who isnt an total 1st class asshole is the straight middle class decent MAN... and if you read the authors BIO and her others stories the ONLY type of people that get hurt and crushed are straight men.
in
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Anonymous01/24/07
still drawing strong feelings!
Dear Angique:
So many of us, so strongly moved by this painful story! It's a testimony to how skillfully you have created the characters that we care so much about what they are going through....
Best, ohio
by
Anonymous01/24/07
I give up!
This started out as an interesting if confusing cheating wife story but at this point, I have to agree with Cbank13. I can't figure out where this story is going. There seems to be no consistancy to the story , best friends become submissive bitches and Eric the only likeable character in the story becomes totally intransigent and refuses to listen to anyone. I give up on the story.
60 year old George
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Anonymous01/24/07
Wow
I sure was surprised by this turn of events. Mary is one mean lady. Irene, hopefully, has the smarts to discover a way to keep her and Eric together while Irene thinks about continuing her affair with Phil and admits to years of slut sex with him before Eric, the love of her life came along. After all she has admitted to being a slut at heart.
HEHE, so many ways to go with this one, KEEP up the good work and keep the twists coming. This story can definitely be one long novel, I LOVE IT!!!!!
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Anonymous01/24/07
very interesting
unlike others, i like the last 3 more than the first 4. your characters are well developed.
the letter "E" is well deserved. one of the few in this site who can certainly write.
Frankly I hated this part as the story goes down to the dumps. What if not a thinly veiled morality tale of the noon time soap opera variety. Let’s watch the ill fated lives of the rich and the corrupted. Yes they are immoral. Yes, they go chapter after chapter through all the sexual deviations that we normal boring people just read about in the encyclopedia. Yes they seem to enjoy their life more then we do but hey, they will be punished and they are all evil and they all suffer!
No need for much logic or development in this format. What is the next fascinating depravity we could expect to hear next week? How about submissive males making it with small pets? Or how about harder S/M in larger groups? It does not really matter, as long as we don’t forget the mandatory tearful confession of one of the sinners, this can go on almost to the last entry of the Encyclopedia of Sexual Pathology. How fun can that be (and all written in wonderful flare and style).
by
Anonymous01/24/07
this story is what
phil is a asshole that what the writer keep saying.irene is a slut and mary is a slut.eric is what?that what i'm trying to fine out.is he the punching bag of every scumbag in the story.when is he going to become a man and destory phil and whoever bothers him.been a submitive man is crap in life.keep piling the shit on eric and he will be gay shortly.
by
Anonymous01/24/07
Nonsense
This "story" is dying of its own weight. No one cares what's happening in the story line any longer, least of all me.
Whats all this nonsense about what happened to Irene and the baby did eric finally divorce her why throw all of this Master crap into the story you never mentioned this before in the other chapters why now why didnt you just end it saying Eric Divorced Irene and him going on with his life.
Pat
Atlanta,Ga
I find it amazing how the first several chapters almost sounded as though they'd been written by a good writer. But then came Chapter 4! What an amazing read, and it continues now through Chapter 6! It's almost as if the story has been written by two separate authors........the earlier Eric and Elaine story, and a seemingly, at least to me, more accomplished author when Eric met Irene. Maybe all of that speaks to the writing abilities of angiquesophie. Congrats on the "E"! This has been a very well-written story, that easily keeps my interest!
by
Anonymous01/24/07
this is getting more and more insane by the chapte
yeah is all of this neccessary? The only thing that im getting from the story as of now is that all women are evil bitches and your better off becoming gay. Can't you just end this story, have eric divorce irene, settle the score with irene, mary, and phil, and then marry i nice man or women and end it already?(at this point unless it starts to make sense again I just want it to end).
It turns to BDSM ... I am surprised and in suspense.
by
Anonymous01/24/07
It's hard
It's hard to be entertained by less than expectation or possibility.
It's difficult to maintain interest in something that advertently demeans and disgusts when more is possible.
When higher than average ability and imagination persists in male humiliation as the primary issue in their storyline it is a a waste of space and talent except for the very few into male demeanment and helpless inflicted pain.
But this writer has chosen the lower balance as her mission in this rambling sinkhole of lessor humanity however coyly sensitive she tries to make it.
Is this your excitement writer?
by
Anonymous10/27/11
Spewing! DWmoroncuck didn't comment on this one!
No matter, still highly deserving of 5*****'s. Thank you author!
Your writing skills are fantastic! But your thoughts remind me of the playground area at Micky D's, balls flying everwhere, kids screaming and just total chaos. Maybe you need an electronic syphoning device tapped into both sides of your brain merging it into something that makes a little fucking sense. I'm weak I gave it a 4.
Nice writing but could you please start tieing up some of these plot lines?
Before you add any others? I am guessing you do later on, at least I hope so. How about a lil justice or revenge for Eric, or the hinted demise of arrogant boy? OldBear.
by
Anonymous03/19/15
Well that was unexpected.
Congrats. Great Chapter. Four out of five. That was very unexpected. It surprised me and I like surprises. It seemed to fit perfectly into this story. I am not normally a restraint, torture and domination guy, but this was so well written I enjoyed it. I still have no idea where this story is going. But now I'm not taking anything for granted. after I write this I will look at the other comments and see what they say.
English
This was probably the best chapter yet . . .
Very well written once again. A few inconsistencies but mostly hangs together. Interesting to hear this point of view. But we don't find out anything about the contacts with Eric where she warns/tells him, the attempts to phone him (which he rebuffs), and so forth. I guess another chapter is needed for Mary to tell us some more . . . By the way, this is just a story/fantasy/fairytale, but don't ever leave someone tied up and gagged, not even for a little while. It's extremely dangerous. One question: OK, I understand Mary is angry that it appears Irene (her "friend") is going to carry Phil's child, the child that should have been hers, but how did she ever get the courage to fight with/split from Phil, her "master" who heaps humiliation on her and she gets off on it ("I finally came when he pissed on my face . . . ")?
Evil
Truly evil. I cringed when I read this. Mary needs help. Fast. She's very unbalanced and has no redeeming qualities. She uses her friend, knowing her husband is on the make and then calls her a slut. And she takes revenge on her. Irene and Eric should have runned from this poisonous couple. Evil bets evil.
Wow! What just happened? I was really
enjoying a very interesting story, and BAM!! I don't have a clue any more. This was off the wall strange. I'm not sure if I even want to read a part 7, if this is the direction the story is going to go. I did not care for this chapter at all.
why you keep teasing with this story
it would be a good story if you stop fucking around with it.write the dam story and get it over with.like you enjoy yourself talking.
of the characters Mary is probably the only
one that knows who they are and what they are doing. Phil is a prime asshole, nothing more, nothing less, just a piece of nothing meat. Eric is a love sick fool, who may grow up this time, maybe. Irene is simply and purely a pure slut. Betraying her best friend, betraying her husband, and finally betraying herself, and has been. In all likelyhood Mary will eliminate Phil, after all the worm does turn. And Eric needs to grow up and throw out the trash. Maybe Eric would be better off getting a boyfriend, he has no idea how to pick girls.
Reading your story...
...makes me long to be around sane people, and authors. You took longer to say, "Phil tied me up and made me watch while he and Irene did it by the pool," than I could have imagined. It became rather boring after about 45 seconds and left me wanting to get on with my life and forget about the story. Stringing the reader along is not always a good thing, as in this case.
congrats on the "E"
You earnrd it with the quality of your writing. This is a very well written story! It gives me hope that my English will one day be as good as yours. I do find the situation with Mary and Phil to be a bit forced, but it does force the story where you want it to go. I love the depth of your characters and the humanity they show.
Like a Onion
This story is like a Onion, peel away one layer and another surfaces! Keep it going, but please keep in mind that its a story in parts, so don't make it to difficult to read with some pauses in between.
Thanks for writing!
how is the Author going to FUCK over Eric again?
sorry this chapter added nothing to the story.
In chapter 7 ERIC gets ganged raped by Klingons women....
I am STILL waiting for an RATIONAL explanation as to why ERIC got beaten almost to the point od death by Eliene's "friends" at the end of Chapter 3
why after all Eilene had put ERIC through would a smart guy like ERIC (who at that point in teh story has FULL knowledge of Eliene' lies and whoring) simply walk away with a large black Man and get beaten in an alley?
oh thats right!!! ERIC is a white straight DECENT man that believes is Love maariage and responsibility... and therefore is of course the ENEMY of the gay movement..................
Irene is a goddam whore as was ERIC's his previous wife... and Mary is a cowards .. the only perosn in these chapter who isnt an total 1st class asshole is the straight middle class decent MAN... and if you read the authors BIO and her others stories the ONLY type of people that get hurt and crushed are straight men.
in
still drawing strong feelings!
Dear Angique:
So many of us, so strongly moved by this painful story! It's a testimony to how skillfully you have created the characters that we care so much about what they are going through....
Best, ohio
I give up!
This started out as an interesting if confusing cheating wife story but at this point, I have to agree with Cbank13. I can't figure out where this story is going. There seems to be no consistancy to the story , best friends become submissive bitches and Eric the only likeable character in the story becomes totally intransigent and refuses to listen to anyone. I give up on the story.
60 year old George
Wow
I sure was surprised by this turn of events. Mary is one mean lady. Irene, hopefully, has the smarts to discover a way to keep her and Eric together while Irene thinks about continuing her affair with Phil and admits to years of slut sex with him before Eric, the love of her life came along. After all she has admitted to being a slut at heart.
HEHE, so many ways to go with this one, KEEP up the good work and keep the twists coming. This story can definitely be one long novel, I LOVE IT!!!!!
very interesting
unlike others, i like the last 3 more than the first 4. your characters are well developed.
the letter "E" is well deserved. one of the few in this site who can certainly write.
As the story spins out of orbit…
Frankly I hated this part as the story goes down to the dumps. What if not a thinly veiled morality tale of the noon time soap opera variety. Let’s watch the ill fated lives of the rich and the corrupted. Yes they are immoral. Yes, they go chapter after chapter through all the sexual deviations that we normal boring people just read about in the encyclopedia. Yes they seem to enjoy their life more then we do but hey, they will be punished and they are all evil and they all suffer!
No need for much logic or development in this format. What is the next fascinating depravity we could expect to hear next week? How about submissive males making it with small pets? Or how about harder S/M in larger groups? It does not really matter, as long as we don’t forget the mandatory tearful confession of one of the sinners, this can go on almost to the last entry of the Encyclopedia of Sexual Pathology. How fun can that be (and all written in wonderful flare and style).
this story is what
phil is a asshole that what the writer keep saying.irene is a slut and mary is a slut.eric is what?that what i'm trying to fine out.is he the punching bag of every scumbag in the story.when is he going to become a man and destory phil and whoever bothers him.been a submitive man is crap in life.keep piling the shit on eric and he will be gay shortly.
Nonsense
This "story" is dying of its own weight. No one cares what's happening in the story line any longer, least of all me.
So full of nonsense
Whats all this nonsense about what happened to Irene and the baby did eric finally divorce her why throw all of this Master crap into the story you never mentioned this before in the other chapters why now why didnt you just end it saying Eric Divorced Irene and him going on with his life.
Pat
Atlanta,Ga
An Amazing Read
I find it amazing how the first several chapters almost sounded as though they'd been written by a good writer. But then came Chapter 4! What an amazing read, and it continues now through Chapter 6! It's almost as if the story has been written by two separate authors........the earlier Eric and Elaine story, and a seemingly, at least to me, more accomplished author when Eric met Irene. Maybe all of that speaks to the writing abilities of angiquesophie. Congrats on the "E"! This has been a very well-written story, that easily keeps my interest!
this is getting more and more insane by the chapte
yeah is all of this neccessary? The only thing that im getting from the story as of now is that all women are evil bitches and your better off becoming gay. Can't you just end this story, have eric divorce irene, settle the score with irene, mary, and phil, and then marry i nice man or women and end it already?(at this point unless it starts to make sense again I just want it to end).
Very interesting
It turns to BDSM ... I am surprised and in suspense.
It's hard
It's hard to be entertained by less than expectation or possibility.
It's difficult to maintain interest in something that advertently demeans and disgusts when more is possible.
When higher than average ability and imagination persists in male humiliation as the primary issue in their storyline it is a a waste of space and talent except for the very few into male demeanment and helpless inflicted pain.
But this writer has chosen the lower balance as her mission in this rambling sinkhole of lessor humanity however coyly sensitive she tries to make it.
Is this your excitement writer?
Spewing! DWmoroncuck didn't comment on this one!
No matter, still highly deserving of 5*****'s. Thank you author!
Thanks
For sharing. I think???????
This Was Really Bad...
A story gone horribly wrong.
Yo
What the fuck happened here???
This story is really nuts and I think its gonna get worse before it gets better. We'll see...
RIGHT BRAIN, LEFT BRAIN?
Your writing skills are fantastic! But your thoughts remind me of the playground area at Micky D's, balls flying everwhere, kids screaming and just total chaos. Maybe you need an electronic syphoning device tapped into both sides of your brain merging it into something that makes a little fucking sense. I'm weak I gave it a 4.
What?!
I wasn't expecting this. So good.
Nice writing but could you please start tieing up some of these plot lines?
Before you add any others? I am guessing you do later on, at least I hope so. How about a lil justice or revenge for Eric, or the hinted demise of arrogant boy? OldBear.
Well that was unexpected.
Congrats. Great Chapter. Four out of five. That was very unexpected. It surprised me and I like surprises. It seemed to fit perfectly into this story. I am not normally a restraint, torture and domination guy, but this was so well written I enjoyed it. I still have no idea where this story is going. But now I'm not taking anything for granted. after I write this I will look at the other comments and see what they say.
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