No one has even gotten naked yet and already Your story has Me going nutz here! I can't wait to read how this unfolds between these 2. Keep up the great writing!
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Anonymous03/17/07
More Please
I echo the comment I made on your first story: More please.
You've got us all waiting for some action.
Your writting is good, maybe even better than good. But, being as young as you are, maybe you don't understand that older men need time. Time to become erect, time to stroke their cock as they look at your photo and read your wonderful fantasy. Time to allow their mind to cast you in the role you have created and picture you, innocent and wanting. Time to allow their imagination and hand to stimulate their cock to the point of ejaculating and feeling your tight, virginal pussy gripping their throbbing cock. Just a few pointers about us older men.haha
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Anonymous02/17/08
continuing the story
i like the way you tease. Both the characters and the reader. The development of the storyline is so important. Keep up th good work.
I am gonna go so far as to say you experinced this little tale. Please write more, you are doing wonderfully. Am sure your fan club would like to read the rest of the story.
I want more, PLEASE!! This is an AMAZING buildup and I want to hear a lot more.
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Anonymous11/05/11
sexy
Your writing is terrific being only 18yo. And it's sexy as hell that you planned this out. There are two girls your age in my life and I wished this happened to me.
PLEASE FINISH
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Anonymous07/24/12
pls go on
good start - looking forward to the real seduction
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Anonymous07/21/15
I must be reading something from my sunday school class
English
loved it
just in case my other message did not go through. you really know how to create sexual tension. I want more...
Nice.
I am enjoying the build up.
Keep going, please
This story is great, but please don't make us wait so long for the next chapter!
Keep trying
I really would have enjoyed the story if it contained some sort of sex action but this could be a library book in the kiddies dept.
Needs an ending!
I hope you finish this soon!
One horny male...
No one has even gotten naked yet and already Your story has Me going nutz here! I can't wait to read how this unfolds between these 2. Keep up the great writing!
More Please
I echo the comment I made on your first story: More please.
You've got us all waiting for some action.
A Top Rating, But....,
Your writting is good, maybe even better than good. But, being as young as you are, maybe you don't understand that older men need time. Time to become erect, time to stroke their cock as they look at your photo and read your wonderful fantasy. Time to allow their mind to cast you in the role you have created and picture you, innocent and wanting. Time to allow their imagination and hand to stimulate their cock to the point of ejaculating and feeling your tight, virginal pussy gripping their throbbing cock. Just a few pointers about us older men.haha
continuing the story
i like the way you tease. Both the characters and the reader. The development of the storyline is so important. Keep up th good work.
Fantastic
I am gonna go so far as to say you experinced this little tale. Please write more, you are doing wonderfully. Am sure your fan club would like to read the rest of the story.
Please, I want more!
its really good :)
write more please
great start
looking forward to more... nice pacing in the build-up, not too slutty but confident female character... really good.
Awesome!
I want more, PLEASE!! This is an AMAZING buildup and I want to hear a lot more.
sexy
Your writing is terrific being only 18yo. And it's sexy as hell that you planned this out. There are two girls your age in my life and I wished this happened to me.
PLEASE FINISH
pls go on
good start - looking forward to the real seduction
I must be reading something from my sunday school class
not nothing!
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