this was so lovely thankyou
Absolutely Fantastic. A real romance story yet no-erotic and I had to read it through. Very well done, a real winner in my book. I'll gladly sign my name to the comment.
That's a good way to pass into the next existence.
I enjoyed the by-play about the cat, doing what cats do best.
What a lovely story!
Sad and sweet. Wonderful imagery. The cat was a nice touch. Good luck in the contest.
I loved it, a sweet story, tender and succinct. Good luck in the contest!
I'd give it a "6" if I could. Loved the inclusion of the little kitty. Do keep writing, please.
a wonderful story.
I think this is what heaven will be like
We can all hope that it will be this way when the time comes. Damn you write a great story. Thanks!
A love throughout time, so wonderful. Good luck in the contest. You've got my vote.
A sweet evocative endearing story. One that is tragic but at the same time reassuring. Rachlou once again has written a character into her story that summons up so many emotions ~ all of them good. Terrific Write. Enjoyable read.
Authoress - you have a special touch to move emotions regardless of age.
With Very High Regard
Concise; flows well. I like the cat.
I know. Men aren't supposed to cry.
Beautiful and moving - good luck in the contest!
Very moving, Rach. A really well done, sentimental piece, good luck in the contest.
That was such a sweet, peaceful read. Good luck in the contest.
Very touching, evocative, and peaceful.
Good luck in the contest!
A wonderfully touching story, Rach. You've captured her life, her love, her longings and evoked such a heartfelt reaction in readers.
even though I got a sneak peak, I still loved reading this again. The cat was a great touch, adding a little levity to the story. Excellent story, Rach, as always.
An intense story of real love. Your imagery is so tangible, I felt like I could reach out and touch Oliver's fur, feel his warm little cat-body. The flow of words is smooth, and and rich, and deliciously sad.
Simply a beautiful story. A treasure. Thank you for writing it.
sigh....I'm a closet romantic. Such beautiful imagery, it filled the senses, moved gracefully as a dance itself, bittersweet and beautiful.
A beautifully written story. Just wow! There is doubt that you are a true writer. Good luck in the contest.
to go on your Lit author page to contrast with the red "H" that is next to so many of your stories.
This is excellent. Moving. One of the best reads I have had. I am grateful that your story ended up under my cursor.
getting more sentimental. Beautiful stories such as this one will make that happen. All my kitties say "Hi!" to Oliver. Phil
It isn't enough that you're stunningly beautiful, you have to be a fantastic writer too? I give in, I give up! You had me at "Dust motes dances in the air like tiny fairies"! :)
You made me cry!
I mean, really cry!!
And I cried buckets for ages over this!!!
It was amazing, I wish I could write things like this.
I hope you won't mind me adding it as my favourite or printing it off?
(Every now and then I like to cry. And in my line of work it helps to let it all out as it were.)
Thank you so much.
That was a wonderful story but it pisses me off that I knew the ending as soon as she looked at herself in the mirror.
Still, the imagery was beautiful. I could not only see her, I could feel Eleanor.
Now, I'm going to have to read more of your stuff. Unfortunately, when I am writing I never read. My writing must be coming to an end, now that I am reading.
I kind of feel like the wicked witch, "I'm melting."
Thanks for a wonderful story that was beautifully crafted.
It should be a happy theme since Eleanor is so happy but I feel like Jessie, so sad.. Wonderfully told story.. A tear-jerker but wonderfully told.
So beautifully, hauntingly sad... Yet lovely.
to be able to comment adequately on this story. Wonderfully imagined, and so poured into our minds. :-)
Go for it!!
... for the beautifully touching story. So far it's the best contest entry I've read.
No points off for it, but this seems awfully derivative – think "Titanic" LOL! Oh heck, that story was probably derivative as well. Also, it was pretty predictable, and consequently lacked a certain amount of 'punch'
AND NOW THE LONG DARK WAIT FOR OTHERS TO APPEAR. tk u mlj lv nv
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