The story flows well, but... I was lost on the how and why she was there? At first I thought she was a colleague intending an affair... The written word is good - just want to know the 5 W's... and really, men don't take baths... now a jacuzzi - different matter.
Do real men take baths????
The story flows well, but... I was lost on the how and why she was there? At first I thought she was a colleague intending an affair... The written word is good - just want to know the 5 W's... and really, men don't take baths... now a jacuzzi - different matter.
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