by Kathi
Cute start but can you please give us more in a chapter. One of the major downsides of a story like this is that by the time the next chapter gets read you barley remember what was in the previous chapter.
In regard to 'Ended to soon' wanting a description, what's wrong with using your imagination? One of my pet peeves when it comes to LW stories is that every mediocre story is the same in this regard. "blonde with a tight body, looks ten years younger than her age, 38DD tits". They're all the same and I'm tired of it. You'll note that the writers of some of the best stories don't bother with it, and that's one of the reasons their stories are as good as thy are.
Joe.
what a bunch of cut throat readers. give the story time to develop. how many stories have the commenters written?
You are starting this story very nicely.