Wow Jim that was great! You’ve done it again giving us interracial love together with hot incestuous coupling and you did it oh so beautifully. Such a clever plot deserves a continuation and I eagerly await a sequel about Joe and his Vietnamese family. Pete.
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Anonymous02/08/07
you do what you do best,write great stories
great sexual and fun stories hard to beat.you the best at writing them.
You know you want to write the next chapter. Are you as conflicted as Sam? Or should turn the female equivalent of Joe loose on you? Write the thing!
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Anonymous02/08/07
Super
Loved it. This is the best story I have read today and I've almost read them all. Thanks again.
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Anonymous02/08/07
The best of all worlds!!!!!!!!
Jim, your latest writing is truly a masterpiece!!!!It definitely needs to have at least five chapters for completion. The possible plots and sub-plots are endless,and the anticipation soooooo exciting. Please,please continue this wonderful story.
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Anonymous02/08/07
please
please give us more. your writting is excellant as normal for you.
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Anonymous02/08/07
I was there for three years..... I wish I knew..
I was there for three years.. I didn't us any protection because I was a dum young kid. I grew up fast and started being like the story. I learned my B&D and S&M roots there and there still with me to this day. I flash back sometime late at night when I set and looking up at the stars. Thinking back when I see some stars remembering the lovely and young and fun time with the mom-sone and daughters. I would like to know if there still there but I don't think I will every find out..
Write the story... Tho it's not TRUE It's still enjoying reading.
I would like to use my Biker and Master name but with the way this world is going to many people know to much and try and us things agains us. SO I will sign Anonymous
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Anonymous02/08/07
which is worse
I don't know which is worse, this pile of bigotted garbage masquarading as a story or the readers who thought this was a wonderful story.
the Ct. Yankee
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Anonymous02/08/07
Learn to write then get back to us
I quote - I turned slowly to face the offending noise, and was blinded for a second by the sun shining over her shoulder, but then simply panicked when I recognized the silhouette. – offending noise? I thought it was a voice? ‘but then simply panicked’. Um. Wouldn’t it be ‘and panicked’? Why simply? Really, you seem to have a very fertile imagination – maybe you can learn how to put it on paper.
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Anonymous02/09/07
gross
You're sick. A grandfather and his granddaughter were talking about.
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Anonymous02/09/07
More! More!
I enjoyed the story! I found it very hot,very sexy and by the time I finished reading it I realized my panty was wet!I am looking forward to reading the next installment!
I really like your abrupt style and your non apologetic approach to this.
Thank you for a great story. Please, do write more.
-Pultoy
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Anonymous02/09/07
Waiting!!
Nice build up to the next Chapter. Waiting for you to finish the next installment. Excelent start to a good storyline, contrary to what others would have you believe.
Thank you.
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Anonymous02/09/07
I want more!
Very good outline and twist. I cant wait to read the second chapter!!!
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Anonymous02/09/07
I have no doubts as to the possibility of the
story. I am surprised only one anti-Vietnam peacenik crawled out from under a rock to complain.
Families have close relatives on both sides were common, which "hurt" our efforts to do background searches on workers to give security clearances.
too many things too real.
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Anonymous02/09/07
Despite
Unfortunately, too many anti-Asian rumors exist about the Vietnam war, and this story runs them up big time. However, there are also too many truths about how couples were broken up, especially at the end of the war. To read about the chaos that the end created, read White Christmas in April by my father Toby Haynsworth.
OK, is this story good? Hell Yeah! The idea of fucking your granddaughter unknowingly is far fetched, but it is well done.
The thing about love that makes it so special is that even when a guy acts like a jerk, a woman can love him. As a veteran of Viet Nam, I loved this story. It rang true, just as Joe rang Sam's bell.
a near 60 year old guy cums 5 times with Sam in less than 24 hrs? Even with Viagra, you're still smoking dope if you believe that. While your writing is very good, another error is the guy's mental state. At 60, his thoughts and actions are described in the same way as when he was 18. Rough, tough, and crude have to mellow at least a little over the years. He is so preoccupied with sex (young sex)that in today's world, he would be on several states' sex offender list. As a follow-on thought, instead of being politically correct with all participants being 18 or over, tell the truth about how it was in-country. You stated, "The girl coulda been anywhere from eighteen to thirty-six. I didn't have a clue." The truth would have been she could have been anywhere from fifteen to twenty-five. I will agree that it was usually impossible to tell in the oriental culture. In the coming chapters/stories, please don't screw every woman that shows up. His reunion with Han and Kim and the kids should not end up in an orgy; give him a little dignity for once.
don't kill the story as soon as I read the title and trailer on the author's page. Would have been a killer story if I had discovered their relationship in the third page/chapter.
First, Please continue this lovely story. Next, what a hot, sexy, and beautiful storyline. This is my favorite story of yours so far. Tremendous work on recalling Vietnam and piecing together the stories you heard growing up with your own material. I felt as if I could really see the picture of the pool when Sam saw it. The sex scenes were ultra steamy. Certainly some of the best I have read of yours. It reads like you really enjoyed writing it too. Thank you.
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Anonymous01/25/08
More PLease
Thought it was really great. We need another chapter - preferably now.
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Anonymous03/22/08
Experienced
Sounds a lot like me when I was in Thailand. Would still love to reconnect with her.
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Anonymous06/02/08
More Please!
Something about this story was incredibly hot. Probably my fav so far! I hope you'll continue! :)
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Anonymous07/05/08
write more please
please continue this storyline. there are so many possibilities.
sweet and hot.. but the jingoistic racism was a bit annoying. I know I know.. essential for the plot and he certainly came around a bit... I definitely would love to see a chapter 2 with a reunion with Kim and of course Cyn's deflowering...
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Anonymous12/16/08
CONTINUE
YOU HAVE TO CONTINUE THIS!
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Anonymous01/08/09
Memories
While slightly younger than your character, I didn't go incountry until '69, it revived memories. Thank you
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Anonymous03/28/09
where
where is part 2 by now you should of had more than 2 pages of ideas. Thanks Mike from Texas.
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Anonymous04/19/09
.......Great Story......
...Wow....been a feist the last few days reading all these stories you have written,.. Scouries this one is a gem,..i sure hope you continue this story..on and on and on and on...thank you so much for the entertainment,...much, much better than going to the movies...
Nice job, the characterization and description was good. Like Hongluobo, the jingo racism and hi-tech peeping almost turned me off - I'm glad I continued, because there's some deep thought in this one - I can see this guy, recoiling from what he wants, but can't have, and going the other way completely.
Wa-a-ay better story than you usually see in a porn site, almost an x-rated version of, say, "Gran Torino" or "Miss Saigon" - not that they're in any way derivative of those stories, but you've explored the same kind of themes here.
Very,very nice work. Just a suggestion - if you cleaned this up, took out the incest, and say made it into a story where this PTSD-burned high tech peeping Tom, say, simply discovers that Samantha is his grand daughter, maybe snaps back something in Vietnamese, starts dealing with his PTSD and re-unites with his Asian family (grin-maybe make it one Viet girl) I think this would be a saleable story. Something like an alternative ending to "Miss Saigon", or, for that matter, the "Lt Dan" subplot in "South Pacific"
I am not puffing smoke, dude, there's the roots of a good mainstream story here.
wish I'd thought of it. Jeeze, I can see a really good, marketable story here. If you need a co-author, I'd be glad to help,man.
English
You’ve done it again!!!!
Wow Jim that was great! You’ve done it again giving us interracial love together with hot incestuous coupling and you did it oh so beautifully. Such a clever plot deserves a continuation and I eagerly await a sequel about Joe and his Vietnamese family. Pete.
you do what you do best,write great stories
great sexual and fun stories hard to beat.you the best at writing them.
Knock off the teasing......
Jim,
You know you want to write the next chapter. Are you as conflicted as Sam? Or should turn the female equivalent of Joe loose on you? Write the thing!
Super
Loved it. This is the best story I have read today and I've almost read them all. Thanks again.
The best of all worlds!!!!!!!!
Jim, your latest writing is truly a masterpiece!!!!It definitely needs to have at least five chapters for completion. The possible plots and sub-plots are endless,and the anticipation soooooo exciting. Please,please continue this wonderful story.
please
please give us more. your writting is excellant as normal for you.
I was there for three years..... I wish I knew..
I was there for three years.. I didn't us any protection because I was a dum young kid. I grew up fast and started being like the story. I learned my B&D and S&M roots there and there still with me to this day. I flash back sometime late at night when I set and looking up at the stars. Thinking back when I see some stars remembering the lovely and young and fun time with the mom-sone and daughters. I would like to know if there still there but I don't think I will every find out..
Write the story... Tho it's not TRUE It's still enjoying reading.
I would like to use my Biker and Master name but with the way this world is going to many people know to much and try and us things agains us. SO I will sign Anonymous
which is worse
I don't know which is worse, this pile of bigotted garbage masquarading as a story or the readers who thought this was a wonderful story.
the Ct. Yankee
Learn to write then get back to us
I quote - I turned slowly to face the offending noise, and was blinded for a second by the sun shining over her shoulder, but then simply panicked when I recognized the silhouette. – offending noise? I thought it was a voice? ‘but then simply panicked’. Um. Wouldn’t it be ‘and panicked’? Why simply? Really, you seem to have a very fertile imagination – maybe you can learn how to put it on paper.
gross
You're sick. A grandfather and his granddaughter were talking about.
More! More!
I enjoyed the story! I found it very hot,very sexy and by the time I finished reading it I realized my panty was wet!I am looking forward to reading the next installment!
Not like anything I have read
This was most intriguing.
I really like your abrupt style and your non apologetic approach to this.
Thank you for a great story. Please, do write more.
-Pultoy
Waiting!!
Nice build up to the next Chapter. Waiting for you to finish the next installment. Excelent start to a good storyline, contrary to what others would have you believe.
Thank you.
I want more!
Very good outline and twist. I cant wait to read the second chapter!!!
I have no doubts as to the possibility of the
story. I am surprised only one anti-Vietnam peacenik crawled out from under a rock to complain.
Families have close relatives on both sides were common, which "hurt" our efforts to do background searches on workers to give security clearances.
too many things too real.
Despite
Unfortunately, too many anti-Asian rumors exist about the Vietnam war, and this story runs them up big time. However, there are also too many truths about how couples were broken up, especially at the end of the war. To read about the chaos that the end created, read White Christmas in April by my father Toby Haynsworth.
OK, is this story good? Hell Yeah! The idea of fucking your granddaughter unknowingly is far fetched, but it is well done.
Hell yes i love it
dude you have to write some more of this one damn i could not stop reding it i will give you a hundred on this one
Hell yes i love it
dude you have to write some more of this one damn i could not stop reding it i will give you a hundred on this one
Romance with Attitude
Over the top - what a strange story. I usually don't read let alone like incest stories, but somehow this one works.
great story
an excellent storie continue it so they all get together in the end
so true
I have a cousin who left a family in nam and he has never got over it.
Loved it
Ill really like part 2 ... and 3!
Interesting Reading
Well written, with a great storyline. Do continue with part 2!
more, please
Please comtinue with this story... it was well written and got the juices flowing
Potpourri
Your writing has improved significantly I am pleased to note and say.
Your characters are varied and remain consistent throughout the story.
I only noted one grammmatical error, not uncommon here -- the use of plural instead of possessive, e.g., "famalies" instead of "family's".
I look forward to your continuing sequels to this tale.
continue your story!
continue the story of the vietnamese grandaughters to include the grand mothers coming stateside to see you!
Great Story
The thing about love that makes it so special is that even when a guy acts like a jerk, a woman can love him. As a veteran of Viet Nam, I loved this story. It rang true, just as Joe rang Sam's bell.
Nookiehunter
Intense
Can't wait for more. This story has so many neat ways to go.
PLEASE give your readers a "forever after" or "Or oh SH**!"
I am fairly new to the site an rreeaalllly enjoy
your work..
Thanking you in advance..Rick (nor cal usa)
HOT HOT HOT!!!!!
I LOVED THIS STORY PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!!!!!
Fantastic story!
Can't wait for the second part!
do go on
Raw crude and fantastic I loved it.
Had me so hard I could have squashed a flea with my cock.
Can't wait till you split her sister.
Sweet!
This story was awesome, never mind the length. I can't wait to read the next one!!!!
hot hot hot
Dude, that was awesome. I cant wait for the next installment.
Sorry, Charlie.....
a near 60 year old guy cums 5 times with Sam in less than 24 hrs? Even with Viagra, you're still smoking dope if you believe that. While your writing is very good, another error is the guy's mental state. At 60, his thoughts and actions are described in the same way as when he was 18. Rough, tough, and crude have to mellow at least a little over the years. He is so preoccupied with sex (young sex)that in today's world, he would be on several states' sex offender list. As a follow-on thought, instead of being politically correct with all participants being 18 or over, tell the truth about how it was in-country. You stated, "The girl coulda been anywhere from eighteen to thirty-six. I didn't have a clue." The truth would have been she could have been anywhere from fifteen to twenty-five. I will agree that it was usually impossible to tell in the oriental culture. In the coming chapters/stories, please don't screw every woman that shows up. His reunion with Han and Kim and the kids should not end up in an orgy; give him a little dignity for once.
And My Biggest Bitch....
don't kill the story as soon as I read the title and trailer on the author's page. Would have been a killer story if I had discovered their relationship in the third page/chapter.
Light My Fire
First, Please continue this lovely story. Next, what a hot, sexy, and beautiful storyline. This is my favorite story of yours so far. Tremendous work on recalling Vietnam and piecing together the stories you heard growing up with your own material. I felt as if I could really see the picture of the pool when Sam saw it. The sex scenes were ultra steamy. Certainly some of the best I have read of yours. It reads like you really enjoyed writing it too. Thank you.
More PLease
Thought it was really great. We need another chapter - preferably now.
Experienced
Sounds a lot like me when I was in Thailand. Would still love to reconnect with her.
More Please!
Something about this story was incredibly hot. Probably my fav so far! I hope you'll continue! :)
write more please
please continue this storyline. there are so many possibilities.
loved most of the story
sweet and hot.. but the jingoistic racism was a bit annoying. I know I know.. essential for the plot and he certainly came around a bit... I definitely would love to see a chapter 2 with a reunion with Kim and of course Cyn's deflowering...
CONTINUE
YOU HAVE TO CONTINUE THIS!
Memories
While slightly younger than your character, I didn't go incountry until '69, it revived memories. Thank you
where
where is part 2 by now you should of had more than 2 pages of ideas. Thanks Mike from Texas.
.......Great Story......
...Wow....been a feist the last few days reading all these stories you have written,.. Scouries this one is a gem,..i sure hope you continue this story..on and on and on and on...thank you so much for the entertainment,...much, much better than going to the movies...
Very nice job so far.
Nice job, the characterization and description was good. Like Hongluobo, the jingo racism and hi-tech peeping almost turned me off - I'm glad I continued, because there's some deep thought in this one - I can see this guy, recoiling from what he wants, but can't have, and going the other way completely.
Wa-a-ay better story than you usually see in a porn site, almost an x-rated version of, say, "Gran Torino" or "Miss Saigon" - not that they're in any way derivative of those stories, but you've explored the same kind of themes here.
Very,very nice work. Just a suggestion - if you cleaned this up, took out the incest, and say made it into a story where this PTSD-burned high tech peeping Tom, say, simply discovers that Samantha is his grand daughter, maybe snaps back something in Vietnamese, starts dealing with his PTSD and re-unites with his Asian family (grin-maybe make it one Viet girl) I think this would be a saleable story. Something like an alternative ending to "Miss Saigon", or, for that matter, the "Lt Dan" subplot in "South Pacific"
I am not puffing smoke, dude, there's the roots of a good mainstream story here.
wish I'd thought of it. Jeeze, I can see a really good, marketable story here. If you need a co-author, I'd be glad to help,man.
continue
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEEEEEASE CONTINUE THIS!!!!
Frickin awesome
Write more please...
TERRIFIC
I wasn't too sure at the beginning because of the ethnic slurs, but I understood the context. Now one of my favourites. Your writing is exemplary.
MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
loved it....was there in '73....please write more
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