Goin' Fishin'

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Please write more

so cool!!

Please write more!!! Short but sweet!! Loved it!!!

Never gets old.

This is my third time reading this story and it is just as charming and witty as the first perusal. I add my kudos to those given by others and my thanks for a warm story well told!

read eighteen times

I like how the guy a couple comments before complained about half a story tet gace ya 5 stars

Where is part two?

Love the story but it suddenly ended? Where is part two to this perfect story? I would truly love to read more to this story!

I'll read this again.

Nice. Without any negatives even about Heather, this is a story you'd like yourself participating in. I'll read this again several times I guess.

One of my favorites

I've read this a number of times and have enjoyed it each time. I love your sense of humor and self-deprecation, which shows in the way your characters inter-relate.

Another commenter ( I didn't read them all) wanted the story to be longer, but I must disagree. While I could have read much more and I would have been most content and happy to do so, I love an author who knows when to stop, who leaves us with just enough to fuel our imaginations and allows us to come to our own conclusions beyond that which is presented in the story. Very well done! I would be happy to give you five stars, but I have already done so, and it would just get kicked out at the next sweep. I will also post as Anony Mouse because I have commented before and it will not allow me to do so again under my name. Thanks for a good read.

still waiting

Love the story in my favorites and waiting on the follow up story about Bill and Jenny.
Great one liner(Blond,red finger nails gold jewlery and boobs out to here)

Ron Texas cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

*****

Still one of my all time favorites.
A great pick-me-up tale.

Loved it

especially how the gold digger made a fool of herself

Marry Me?

Too early to ask for that. That was the only very unrealistic kink in this very good story. It was a bit over the top and hurt the story some. Add another page with some time and then declare true love and marriage. 5 stars anyway!

Loved It, Time & Again!!!

And to TimLauder, you're a little dense... This is a little love affair that's been going on for over 13 years, now, I don't know where you're from, but, 13 years is a VERY LONG LOVE AFFAIR, so, go somewhere and hide your shame...

I just wish that MarshAlien was still writing, we NEED more writers like him...

favorite story

I really enjoyed reading it again and again. I would like to see a follow up story on Jenny,Bill ,Marcia and all there friends maybe a little Willie might be in the works.

Ron Texas
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

needs a finish

this ended to soon. should do a follow up of their marriage with maybe a kid or two and maybe heather finally finding the right guy.

love in bloom

Looks like we need a sequil to this story. You need to tell us more about Bill and Jenny and maybe just maybe settle Heather down and find a really nice man for her to marry and be happy with and do away with the gold digger and become a wife and mommy.

Ron. Texas
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

Not seeing what all the fuss is about

Yeah, this was a nice enough story, if you ignore the fact that it's filled with cliché characters, who otherwise lack any real development.

Take the description of Jenny, "She didn't have her cheerleader sister's figure, and her shoulder-length brunette tresses weren't as brassy as her sister's, but God, what a beautiful woman", talk about damning with feint praise. "She's not as good looking as her sister, but 'WOW!' what a beauty!" And that's about all the physical description we get of Willie's main love interest and co-star in this story.

And then there are the sex scenes...I mean sex scene (singular), talk about tepid. After a mediocre, one paragraph blowjob, the rest of their first time sexual encounter is described in two sentences: 1) on cunnilingus - "I scooped her up and threw her on the bed, where I spent the next twenty minutes making her as happy with my mouth, I hoped, as she'd made me with hers.", 2) on making love to his 13-year love interest for the very first time ever - "I didn't say another word until we were done." What heat!...What passion!...I mean, What heat?...What passion? Talk about a real snooze fest! We didn't even get some passionate snogging. This site is LitEROTICA, so where's the "erotica"?

I don't understand the high ratings for this story. It didn't touch my heart. It didn't make me hard. Yeah, it was a little bit clever, but that's about its only saving grace. It's filled with cookie cutter characters (vain, blonde, big boobed, man-stealing cheerleader...check!, less attractive, tomboy, #2 daughter...check!, nerdish dweeb, who becomes rich non-dweeb...check!...oh-so-wise mother, check!).

In MarshAlien's treatise on writing romance stories, "How to Write Romance", he says, "The secret, though, lies not in reading a lot of formulaic romance novels, which would be very time-consuming, but simply in obtaining a copy of the formula itself. Once you join the club...you can start cranking these babies out like nobody's business." He admits to the cookie cutter approach, and it shows. What he failed to grasp by never having bothered to actually read any romance novels/stories for himself, is that they are always based around smoldering, passionate sex scenes, of which this story has none. You can't leave a main ingredient out of the formula. If you want to bake a cake, don't forget the leavening, or the whole thing falls flat.

It's a 3-star effort at best.

this has to be rated

5 stars.......cause most stories should only be rated 1-3 stars but are rated 5 *s
verrry good tale,,just to hurried.

Really enjoyed the story, though it was way short! ...and it really, really needs some good sex in it!

A wonderful story!

Story was more than just beautiful! But, where is part two? Your story is not complete until you do!

Great story. Wish there were more like it on Lit.

And ignore Dark storm. He's just pissed his 2 pathetic stories got lower ratings then this wonderful tale. Both clever and entertaining. Well played.

FAVORITE/5 STARS PLUS

One my all time favorites. Clean simple true love. Loved Jennys mom and maybe her sister can calm her act down and find a nice man and have a couple kids. Everyone in the story were great from Annie,Beth,Carlo,Dave,Marcia and Heather AKA(blond hair,gold jewelery,red nails and boobs out to here). I thought it could have been longer so I am asking for a sequil about them all and there happy famlies($1800 for a dress) I had to put that in now do you have any Jacks if not you need to write a story ok you can have Jacks but you still need to write a seqil.
Ron Texas
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com-----------in my favorites read many times.

I had forgotten this title

then realized I had read it before and liked it so much I had to read it again !

long live the queen

Great story
Do not need a lot of sex to be interesting.

Besides if the hero drives a English car I like him too
Thank you. Very well writte
Samuel

Brilliant!

even if way too abbreviated.
Mother knows best.
But, 8th grade was a long time ago. Does anyone think it might be helpful to get reacquainted before marrying?

would someone help me?

How does "goin Fishin" as a title
have anything to do with the story content?

@rightbank

Goin Fishin presumably comes from the card they played as teenagers. Jacks wherein you say Go Fish.

Matt

Card Lingo

If you can't match a card you say (Go Fish meaning pull a card from the top of the deck). Good Story/ Fun Story about old friends(Marcia) and long lost love(Jenny and Willie/Bill).
Ron. Texas
cowboyridecc@yahoo

Enjoyed it

great love story. Five stars. Second time through.

Second Time

.... this awesome story. I wish it didn't cut off so fast at the end, but the story was so wonderful. It was quirky, fun, energetic, and had real charisma. Thank you!

Going Fishing

I read this story once earlier in the same portal.. And when I came across this story once again I could not but read it once again completely from beginning to the end and enjoyed as much as I had earlier.

A wonderful story

I don't believe I have ever enjoyed a story on this site more than I've enjoyed this one. As I've been a lover of this site since discovering it during its first year of existence, you can guess I've read quite a few. Thank you. ~~S

easy 5*'s but

the ending is WAY TOO SOON kinda dorky asking her to marry you after a couple of days. DAMN give it a bit of time as in an epilog PLEASE!

THOROUGHLY ENJOYABLE

Enjoyed reading this cutie pie of a story. Too abrupt an ending, but otherwise delighted in the characters and story line. All good things come to those who wait, so am waiting for more good things from this talented writer.

Epilog, Please

Wonderful story. How did Jenny adjust to being married and living with Bill? Did Heather grow up and become a good person--after all her mother is a great lady, and so Heather must know how to treat people, especially now that she has to face facts.

PERFECT STORY

I agree with most of the readers an epilog is needed or a sequel to finish off a GREAT story. Please may i have some more? Love you all! Bye. Greg....10 stars

REALLY great!

Read this a long time ago, in fact a number of your stories-Show Moms was also great-think I liked it more 2nd time around, tho my 5 stars from last time had disappeared...got a bit misty eyed at the end...

Enjoyable story, though it ends very abruptly, and it feels pretty rushed to propose so quickly after not having seen someone for 13 years.

GREAT STORY

It is in my favorites read it numerous times and enjoy as much each time. I do think that it ended all of a sudden it could have been longer. I urge you to write a follow up story about them including everyone in the first story. Maybe Heather might meet a nice man and settle down. What do you say?

Ron
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

YES....... Epilog please!!!!!

I agree with most of the comments before me. Wonderful story, a rushed ending, and there could be so much more to this wonderful story.

Realy

like this story......bill


5ssssssssssssssss

WOW

What a beautiful story !!! THANK YOU

go fish

this is read #2 And it is still a 10 * read. I will see how your other stories go.

Love the story!

This was wonderful. The end felt very rushed and could use a second chapter. I loved it!

Love This Story

It still holds it's charm every time I read it. Even though the author hasn't posted on this site for almost eight years I'm still enjoying his work. Thank you "Acts of Grace" by this author is another cute story.

Great

I have read this at least 5x and voted 5* this is only the 2nd time I have commented. it is still as good a story as can be found. That is probably why she is no longer here.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com

Absolutely superb!

I seem to be thinking that a lot lately. Much of the work on Literotica could use a little more editing, and even more of it could use a complete make-over with both a dialogue coach and a plot doctor.

"Goin' Fishin'" is not one of them and reflects a much higher standard of writing than I had become used to. The balance of plot twists and well created characters kept me riveted to my screen. True, everything was pretty well telegraphed after Heather made a fool of herself followed by Marcia's appearance to set the tone for the rest of the story.

This is in my "Top Five" list of stories I love on Literotica, along with "Charity Begins Next Door". This one was humorous in a romantic sort of way, and "Charity..." is romantic in a heart-breaking sort of way. Not the same, even very different, but of such good quality that I have read and re-read them both. That's something I just don't bother to do because there are just too many stories in here to waste time repeating them. Until now.

Thank you "MarshAlien", whoever you are. Your work is well worth reading. Again!

One of the best

This story is simply one of the absolute best I have read on this site.

Thank you and keep writing.

5/5 (would be more if I could)

Outstanding story!

I've read many comments where people complain the story is too long. I wish this one was longer! Fantastic story!

i love this

all my years of reading i have never come across such a wonderful story...looking forward to reading more stories like this

Fantastic story

Well written, beautiful story, one of the best I've read on this site. I would welcome a sequel, following their married life.