i have to believe she loved her job so much that she threatened her marriage for it? why else would she be scared about what the boss had over her? what on earth did he have? her husband knew all about it. she only got into liking the sex later...and of course after the first time, there was the video...but that was all later. i really dont think a clever woman like she would fall for it. really...
the story is nicely written, but i cant get over her motive.
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Anonymous02/07/07
why was he STILL fucking her if he knew weeks ago
Its a good story but after the 1st sex scene the other ones were not REALLY needed even for a site like Lit............................................... ...
Hubby gets suspicous b/c of her change in sex habits so the details of the 1st NEW sex actvities by the wife is needed. Maybe the 2nd to a lessor degree.
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but if all this sex is causing him to say whoa soemthing is really wrong Why is he STILL fucking her ?
Most men would of stopped banging her a long time befoire he did. In the final confrontation scene Hubby mentions the STDs boogeyman. But if that is his concern ... why was he STILL fucking her when he knew she was LIKELY cheating WEEKS and WEKS ago? Wasn't he STD threat just as big weeks ago???
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Anonymous02/07/07
she was whoring and he still fucked her
good story ,but you came up a little short this time.
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Anonymous02/07/07
Jack...don't you know that many readers...like
myself are tired of the guy getting away with murder...Oh he went to jail and all that but there isn't anything as satisfying as a good old fashion ass kicking... Well I would have made sure that he met Bubba in prison and graduated with a very large ass hole and a penchance for big black cock up his ass.
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Anonymous02/07/07
Unreal story
Just how many real men exist in this fucked up world that would have sex with their wife after what this asshole knew about her. Very poor characterzation.
Normally I'm a big fan, but this story was over by the first paragraph. There was no tension created or resolution solved. We all knew what had happened and what the outcome would be in the first few lines. Jim came across as cold and, although I felt some sympathy for his wife, I also couldn't determine her motive for falling so far. Losing her job? Big whoop.
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Anonymous02/07/07
Continuing Sex
Like some of the others, I have a problem with the husband being dumb enough to have sex with her after he knows what's going on. He surely knows he is being exposed to std's! And I would have liked to have heard more pain and anguish from her about destroying their lives like she did.
The husband should have known right away when she denied him her pussy and wanted to suck him off in her mouth.
Pat
Atlanta,Ga
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Anonymous02/07/07
he he
who can refuse sex w/ somebody you love? maybe if you cant get it up. LOL. liked the story. well written. and i do agree, it's not easy being in such a situation. especially, if its someone you love.
My opinion is as like angiquesophie and carlm69. The suspense left at the point of story he had the first vague suspicion. He knows, but he does nothing to clear the situation of their marriage. I think, it's not a normal behaviour. Because I am german?
I would have expected a big bang
Nucleus
* By the way, I like your writing
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Anonymous02/07/07
Bland Content
Not much of a story. Does anyone know what a "story" is anymore? If the story is written with proper punctuation and uses good grammar, I'll read darned near anything. But to keep me interested, there's got to be something beyond that. A story has a pace, a tempo. Things happen and characters react to them with emotions and actions. Jack, old bean, this story has one tempo -- a steady drone that never changes and ends just about where it started. Very disappointing to see this from a writer with your talents.
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Anonymous02/07/07
re: Bland Content
That pretty much says it for me: well written, but a little one note.
The only other thing is the same as the one marked "why was he STILL fucking her if he knew weeks ago." Suddenly he's worried about STDs, after fucking her all that time.
Generally I have liked the writings of Jack Straw, in particular the stories 'Jealousy' and 'Marriage on the Rocks' come to mind. But 'Smoke and Mirrors' just didn't have the tension that it needed to be really good. We knew from the start and from several hints along the way that the marriage was doomed. If the hints weren't enough the over the top sex in the motel with multiple partners foretold the demise of the marriage.**** One other thing was the hold the boss had over Ann. Apparently the fact that she had done a little coke 9 years before coupled with the potential loss of her job was justification in her mind to engage in extramarital sex. Ann was portrayed as a strong woman, the straw that stirred the drink. Why would such a woman allow herself to be blackmailed into sex because of some coke usage almost a decade in the past? It just didn't make sense to me.****Nevertheless I will continue to look forward to any offerings by Jack Straw.
While I basically liked the story, I have to agree
....With a few posters.
The first thing that crossed my mind when I saw this was "Ewww, how could anyone keep having sex with thier wife if they knew she was having sex (and if you didn't know for sure had to assume unprotected sex) with someone else you didn't know?" And if it bothered you enough to divorce her, why would you keep doing it till you got all the sex you could stand out of her? I mean one thing the main character said that I noticed was that he asked her "how she could put his life at risk" by having sex with multiple different men, but it wasn't till he saw her with 4 other men (and at one time 3 men at the same time) that this thought seemed to cross his mind. That would have been my "first" thought not last. Specially after the time she decided to "allow" him anal and he though how loose she felt. I don't believe I could have kept having sex with her till it was impossible for me to deny it any longer. And then he did it again the Thursday after he "saw" her allowing different men to keep coming and going out of the hotel room she was in then went to the gym like nothing was wrong???
What else didn't make sense to me at times, and a lot of authors like to gloss over it, is if the innocent party's in the story are really worried about putting the kids first why don't stop sleeping with the cheating mate when they find out that the wife/husband is cheating on them and start some routine testing for STD's? I mean if they both get HIV or Herpes they will have those diseases for the rest of their, possibly, short lives. And it limits their dating choices in the future if they decide to move on with their lives. Why would they want to take those chances and leave their kids to grow up the best they could without them?
I agree with some that you gave the outcome of the story way at the begininnng, but maybe next time if you decide to go this path maybe say something like "Let me tell everyone a story of how my marriage collapsed with the love of my life"? or something like that. Just a suggestion, but it didn't really bother me much. But to be honest I didn't mind that I knew the outcome before I got to the end, because when you kept saying over and over the marriage was dead in the story I was curious what made it be over.
I liked the story as a whole, but the whole "I knew she was cheating, but until I was beat in the face with the fact that I could no longer ignore the cheating, I kept having sex because it was the best sex I've ever had in my life" rational just seemed out of place given the ending. It was like "I could have handled the cheating and the other men, but when you started pulling a train it killed the marriage." Because if she hadn't crossed some unknown boundry they would have stayed married through out all of this.
Interesting that both Jack and Ohio post non-wimp, been-done-wrong husband stories at about the same time (see "Brisket"). Differences in approach by the two protagonists, but very similar no-nonsense attitudes and no reconciliation in both stories.
Really? I think AND the kids have a major loss, too; that of a loving wife and mother. Plus he mentioned that raising two kids as a single parent isn't that easy. Men aren't hardwired that way, anyway.
Good story but with some cooling off time for him and resolution for her maybe they could start over and try dating??
What does this have to do with loving wives? Its a story about some poor blackmailed woman and a vengeful small-minded man. Why didn't she come to him right away? Becasue she knew he was a tightass jerk.
you did about the man. The fucking whore of a WIFE even said she loved it!! And that's why shewanted to fuck her husband. So sit down and shut the fuck up! Stop bashing the man it was the WIFE who broke her vows you dumb slut!
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Anonymous02/07/07
Some people still dont get it. For some things
there is no excuse good enough, no reason good enough, and no time long enough to forget it and and get back together. These forgive her and get back together people are the same ones that say, well the apologized not forget it and get going. Wrong an apology means I wronged you and I am sorry, it is not punishment, it is not for forgives, it is not for forgetting. The woman destroyed the family, nearly destroyed her husband, and is the one that has ruined the home life of the children. It is not the man's responsibility nor duty to let her pay some penalty and then let her back into the home. She chose to become a whore for something that if the boss had broudht it up she could have sued for illegal termination. She was not a slut, she was not a cheater, she was a whore. Whores take money for sex, when have sex as a part of your job, as a condition of employment, or to provide services for customers or your employer, you are a whore. In for a penny, in for a pound, makes no difference. What makes no sense is this is a small town and she is being pimped out of a small motel with men going in and out and the bank boss is hiring the room. Everyone in the town knows about it. She would already be known as a whore and hubby would already have been discussed in the town as a cuckold. the entire family would be held up to ridicule and talk and the kids would have heard about it in school. The other point of contention is diseases that come up. Unprotected sex with anyone means you have had unprotected sex with everyone they have had sex with. In so stating, she as a whore, is being used by men who use whores and sluts. The odds of STDS, AIDS, Hep C, and everything else is now almost 100% in this day and time, even using condoms no matter what town you live in. All involved need to notified by legal means of their highly likely chance of being infected by one disease or another and these letters would also be given to the wives of the men involved, this is a legal and health issue (lots of fun will come out of this). That should have been one of the conditions of the divorce agreement before the legal divorce. Testing of wife, husband, and children will be necessary for years for delayed sppearance of the diseases. Actually I am in agreement with one critic who says if you are afraid of diseases and suspect why touch and in the regard I agree totally, find excuses, delay responses, avoid kissing, yes kissing. Makes a fun life with a cheater doesnt it. The woman was a slut and it seems weak willed, after all she used drugs and now has a sex need with many men. In her case she doesnt need counselors, nor therapist, she needs medical and phychological help for years to get rid of her addictive behavior. No you dont take cheaters back, they can and will cheat again if the opportunity arises and the excuses offer themselves. And no you dont want a whore raising kids. Out with the trash time to move on and up in life. Thjis is a loving wife tale, story of a loving wife who went astray and a husband who loved her.
I thought that the story as a whole was decent but that there were a number of issues which detracted from what could have been a better story.
Coming up with a good reason for cheating in a blackmail type story, which this is, to me is always difficult. In this story, the driving force for the wife to submit was the fact that she had used drugs in the past. So what! Her drug use was in the past and she had dealt with it. Not a good reason to submit to a blackmailer for sex.
Then to allow yourself to be videotaped having the sex is also ludicrous. Filming the sex could only perpetuate the blackmail. The wife would have to be crazy if she ever expected to get out from under being blackmailed. The drug use was a done deal and wasn't going away and a tape of her having sex would only cement her to her blackmailer.
The wife's change in her sexual behavior, both in sex acts and in agression on her part, could only serve as a red flag to her husband. She might as well have started wearing a tee shirt with the message "I'm fucking around" on it. Very dumb.
The husband accepting the wife's new sexual attitude for so long, just because it was good sex, is also hard to believe.
The husband should also have insisted in the divorce that she discontinue her sexual activity and get tested for STDs. After all, he was insisting on custody of the children because of the wife's sexual behavior. If the behavior continued, she would be just as bad a role model divorced as she would be married.
Well-written with jack_straw's usual flair. His prose is compact and reads easily.
I agree with some of the previous posters: the story's pacing is off. It's slow and somewhat tedious. Perhaps it's due to the lack of narrative drive because the plot is staid.
Like another commenter pointed out, the reason for her acceptance of Spradling's blackmail is weak and, moreover, in today's office climate, the barest hint of sexual harrassment puts HR departments into a frenzy. I just can't accept that his wife would allow an earlier dalliance with drugs to influence her thinking when all she had to do was to document the abuse to get Spradling tossed out on his ass.
Sorry, jack_straw, the story doesn't fly for me. I like the writing but can't give the tale top marks. I thank you for your efforts.
Jack-straw; unlike so many other posters, I liked the story. Although the ending was almost pre-ordained, nonetheless, I liked his comments about how many years of marriage, how good a mother she was, so many good qualities that might have allowed him to seek to forgive her & move past what she had done. While I'm certainly no fan of reconciliation at any costs, the more egregious the behaviour, the more certain it should be that, any other factors notwithstanding, the husband should kick that slutty ass to the curb, and move on. I could see how he could have attempted a reconciliation if she had come to him at the outset, but after weeks of that behaviour and her admitting that she "loved it", he had no other choice. So, all in all, a good read for me
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Anonymous02/08/07
Well told but flawed
I think Alvaron53 summarized it well. You write well and most of your stories are great ,but his one lacked any suspense or any emotion. It was obvious from the beginning that something was amiss, but Jim appeared to be too dumb to face the problem until it was much too late. Looking for your next story.
the Ct. Yankee
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Anonymous02/08/07
okay,,,,
so, for years, he's been begging her to allow him her ass and she's always said NO! and no sucking him off either...
then one fine Wednesday, she comes home, howlering, "Honey, I am SO WET and I want to SUCK YOU OFF, dear beloved,,," and she does just that,,, making his eyebrows raised in a quizzical way,, hmmmm, he said,,, what's gotten into her?
and then more INCRDIBLE sex the following few nights,,, and then the NEXT Wednesday, after her regular fuck sessions (she said's its blackmail first but now her butt's so lose, she's starting to enjoy it a lot; but of course, HE won't know it until when it is already too late),,, anyway, the next Wednesday, it's "Honey, I think I'm gonna let you have what you've always asked for,,, my butt!!! But I wann suck you first! Gosh, I love you so much,,, here, touch me,,, see how wet I am for you, dear beloved?""""
and by NOW he's PRETTY SURE she's been fucking around,,, but, my gosh, he jumps right into bed and sucks her to multiple orgasms!~ and thene they got the oil/lub and they lubed her butt and he sinked right in,,,, uh????, it's kinda loose, don't you think, honey? (but he didn't say it, because no matter what, NOW she's allowed him IN her butt, so he's not gonna bitch about it, even if it seemed, well, really not that necessary to use lubbing oil,,,,
and then, BAM!, "This is what I want you to do: You have 4 minutes to get up stairs, pack a few bags and head out. Our marriage is over and I don't want to hear any thing about it, or see your tears, okay?"
She packs, walks out the door, looks back, with tears in her eyes, and says "I will always love you, you know that, don't you? They blackmailed me, you know that! I didn't wanna do it, especially multiple guys, at first, but they threatened to expose my past cocaine use, you know that,,, so I did it to shut them up,, you also know that. But I love you so much!"
A bit exaggerated, but that's essentially what happened. I mean, come on!
Gotta give it a hundred just cause it's a no wimps ending. To bad he can't get past it, find a good women and get on with life.
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Anonymous02/08/07
I do not get it...
you wrote an outstanding story with great emotion and realism but still the reconciliation-at-all-cost crowd speak about them getting back together. What does Ann have to do to end all talk about reconciliation? Does she have to use hardcore drugs? Does she have to pull tricks as a part of her job? Does she have to fuck unprotected such that she may give her husband a STD? Oh -wait Ann did all of those things!_ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
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Divorce is a very good solution for two people who can not live together. I know siblings who would give their life for their other sibling but who can not live together. There is no doublt that Jimmy at the end of this story still loved and forgave Ann. But that is not the point. Ann's actions fundamentally changed their relationship. Even when she knows that Jimmy knows about her cheating on him she still go out for her Wednesday afternoon fun? She had a week to see how this situation was negatively affecting him and still she carried on. She lied when confronted about it. She wanted to be "forced" into being a slut so she would not have to take responsibility for her actions. The fact that their sex life only got supercharged when she cheated and then fell off also pointed to Jimmy's inadequacies as her lover._ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
But hey a few months in therapy and a few "I am sorry"s is all that is needed according to the reconciliation-at-all-cost crowd to let them date and get back together again. Never mind that Jimmy could never trust her again (that is just male insecurities). Never mind that if he takes her back Ann would know that Jimmy would take her back if she made a "mistake" again. Never mind that Jimmy would always know that he is her second class lover._ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
Thanks for not having Jimmy as a single parent to pick up a young hottie so soon after the divorce. Overall, an outstanding story!
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SleeplessinMD
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Anonymous02/08/07
Predictable but perfect ending for this slut!
Great job on the story. Somewhat predictable but still it is great to read about justice being serviced on these slut-wife characters. If it cheats like a slut, lies like a slut, then "no doubt" it is indeed a "cheating slut-wife". LOL The only thing we could add is if she somehow manages to disappear and kill herself so the poor kids do not have to grow up with a slut-mother. Thanks again for your efforts, author - you are really appreciated!
An unusually high quality set of comments here, and I thank all of you for your input. Almost everyone who commented did so in a civil, constructive manner. I'm one writer who doesn't mind seeing my stories picked apart, as long as it is done without engaging in personal attacks. Regardless of the quality of the writing, us authors put a lot of time and effort into these stories, and at least we have the guts to put our work out there in the open for it to be picked over. There were a lot of issues raised about a lot of the elements in this story that weren't apparent in the writing process. I really thought this was going to be one of my better stories, but obviously it fell a little short of the mark, and for some of the reasons that have been brought out in these comments. Looking ahead, this is probably going to be the last cheating wife story I do for awhile. I seem to have run out of truly original ways to make this sort of thing interesting, and maybe that affected the way the plot seemed to drag in places. At any rate, thanks to all who took the time to read this, and all of my other work. I do appreciate you. We'll have better days soon enough.
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Anonymous02/08/07
not good
I agree with Alvaron53,there is no 'story' because the tension/suspense is destroyed in the first paragraph. Also, the wife is completely unconvincing as she is pushy and intelligent and would just have gone fo harrassment and blackmail complaints.
My real annoyance, as in many stories here, is the husband's comments about the children. Any man who just regards his kids as a bargaining chip, a way of punishing his wife, is beneath contempt. Jimmy has no thought of the best interests of the kids, who they should live with, and thereby loses any sympathy I may have had for him.
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Anonymous02/08/07
A good story
Not one of your best but I was entertained.
Thank you
PT
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Anonymous02/09/07
the wife was a slut
if she had of told her husband, he couldve helped her sue her boss, but since she didnt. but sued the boss after the divorce, she knew what she was doing
Both main characters were unappealing and did not leave me with much reason to care for what happens to them. Frankly, I prefer that at least one of the main characters is at least either intelligent or has an appealing personality. Here there was nothing to hold into in either of the categories. *****
The husband is one of the most compartmentalized male characters I can remember reading in L.W. It seems that the neuro- transmissions between the parts in his brain responsible to thinking and those which are responsible to feelings and then between each of the former and the rest of his body (especially his sex drive) are few; far between and very slow. It would be very much like him to consider: ‘Hmm, I just came to the conclusion that in all likelihood my wife is cheating on, but I am hanging out and talking with my wife and it feels very pleasant that suddenly she is so solicitous of sex with me; wait a minute! I feel some unexpected development is taking place under my belt. It’s all so amazing; I’ll stick around with myself and see what I am going to do next’... *****
The wife on top of being as dumb as they come (blackmail to sex at the workplace by her boss because of past drug use? She is either very dumb or came up with a lousy lie (Then she is dumb again…), she also cares so much for her husband that she has to continue the cheating. He is lucky that she pretty much wrote the road map as to how to catch her (he would never get to it on his own): Tuesday is for pre-performance nervousness; Wednesdays are for guilt - sex (turned later into free tutorials for the husband. Few unchanged repetitions – and voila! He finally gets it. *****
So when, even if for different reasons, both main characters are predictable, slow to think and to act, and the wife does not even have the one redeeming quality of being minimally tolerable as a character - there is not much left to worry about one way or another when the story ends. *****
I appreciate your effort and your writing in general and looking forward for your next story.
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Anonymous04/04/07
a slut for a wife and dumby for a hubby
eating her and fucking her after he found out she fucking men is signing his dead warrant with aids and stds.hubby to weak in his dealing with the lover.
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Anonymous04/16/07
Pretty dispassionate, huh?
Damn, Jack...that was damned dispassionate for the guy to just toss out about fifteen years without apparently even lengthy consideration. I'm picturing a gorgeous woman, totally fucking hot, the mother of your kids, strong, confident, and suddenly seduced into some God-awful behavior. But NO extenuating circumstances? Have at least a smidgeon of patience to find out what the fuck happened and why!
Jack the husband should at least give her another chance suppose he was drugging her and while they were together with Spratt so he can control her did Hubby ever think about that?
The judge should have given him 20 yrs for what he did to her
and her family and Hubby should give her some consideration the length of time they have been together and stuck with her by trying to get her into a institute for drug counceling.
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Anonymous03/29/08
Give her a second chance - WTF?
First of all, a great story with a "realistic" and justified ending. However, the comment prior to this one wanted to know why he did not giver a second chance? This slut wife got off way to easy the way it was. Lying, cheating and being a whore is grounds for permanent removal from the gene pool. Perhaps that person should read the whole story again.
The husband is a wimp. He knows something is wrong and because he is getting great sex does nothing about it. Wimp. As for the wife paying a price. She paid nothing. She still probably does a gangbang a week. She got paid six figures for her fucking. And she got to blame cocaine for it all. Sorry not buying that one. It was a deliberate betrayal of her husband. She is a common slut.
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Anonymous11/21/08
I like the wife. Kick the husband out! hehehe
He is a wimp. Kick him out of there! hehe
I'll take her for myself! hehe
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Anonymous11/21/08
I want that woman! Kick the husband into the sea!
Wimpy fool of a man! Keep the woman! hehe
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Anonymous04/02/09
liked it but...
js..good story until the end. IT was underwhelming. It was like a hole in the bag just happened and the whole story just leaked out. Sorry. Jim
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Anonymous04/12/09
WATCH
Looks like HE should haver had less drinking and sports, tail-gating and kept a eye on his wife. You lost wimp--the boose tank rehab for you.
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Anonymous06/23/09
Oh, well It's her loss ...
... and the children's loss and his loss, too. But take heart and remember the Literotica motto: To forgive is to be weak! To confront and offer a chance to reform is to be weak! To consider the children's needs is to be weak! To be anything but self-centered in the face of cheating is to be weak! This husband fucked up, and, in the process, left sadness for himself, for his wife, and for his children. He loses! But at least he wasn't a wimp!
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Anonymous06/23/09
Sorry
I love a happy ending as much as the next guy but no one would get over this. She loved it, wanted to do it and didn't worry about her kids or her husband, had plenty of chances to stop but wouldn't. Perhaps after therpy and finding out what she is she could move on and have a relationship with someone, but for now she is toxic.
I think it was hubby who threw away his perfect marriage, he tried to get benefit from her cheating. If he knew from very first day , then they were perfect for each other. She was weak but you were supposed to help her out. If you were really so proud man you would not have been with her when you first time find out. No one should try to get benefit from cheating, she could have been fallen for her lover. Hubby in story was really trying to get rid of her in first place , i think. You know she is cheating, you should have given her some hint what she could lose, but no you have to wait you have to see with your eyes. Really wimpy.
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Anonymous05/20/10
Dissappointing Really...
We expect better from you, What type of character it is? Once it was ok and then it was not ok. You knew she was having an affair and you did not stop it, you went along it for MONTHS, what type of of asshole hubby was? He made me sick. I liked wife, she was week, she was stupid, you ought to know people once addicted to something are very weak to any persistence, they need to be taken care of. People who can be addicted are those who does not have enough strength to fight, and it not something you need to remember, you will come to know about these people when you live with them, you will easily agree that they really were weak, I dont say what she did was not wrong, but you ought know she did not cut her hubby off like other cheating wives. First she was forced, and then she was blackmailed, and then she slowly become addicted, does not it show her willpower. Isn't that boys got into smoking, isn't that people got into drugs, at least she was not pulling any crap like, middle-age or lust or drunk, she was telling complete truth. Both at fault, both should have worked it out. We test people when nothing was at risk, but hubby went well with cheating when it gets out of hands, he want out, he did not even tried to help, not even once, she need a stronger man, who can give her some strength to fight, she is better off without willing-cuck. When you love some one you fight for one.
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Anonymous05/31/10
great story
great story, he did everything right except for giving her anything. She showed ewhat kind of mother, wife and person she was, she got away easy and i feel sorry for the next fool.
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Anonymous05/31/10
she knew jack
She had a weakness that was exploited by jack. It fed a need in her, and she (happily?) went along with the wednesday program. Clearly, she balanced out the wednesday tryst and coming clean, and she made her decision. There was a portion of her settlement set aside for the kids?
English
wellll...
i have to believe she loved her job so much that she threatened her marriage for it? why else would she be scared about what the boss had over her? what on earth did he have? her husband knew all about it. she only got into liking the sex later...and of course after the first time, there was the video...but that was all later. i really dont think a clever woman like she would fall for it. really...
the story is nicely written, but i cant get over her motive.
why was he STILL fucking her if he knew weeks ago
Its a good story but after the 1st sex scene the other ones were not REALLY needed even for a site like Lit............................................... ...
Hubby gets suspicous b/c of her change in sex habits so the details of the 1st NEW sex actvities by the wife is needed. Maybe the 2nd to a lessor degree.
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but if all this sex is causing him to say whoa soemthing is really wrong Why is he STILL fucking her ?
Most men would of stopped banging her a long time befoire he did. In the final confrontation scene Hubby mentions the STDs boogeyman. But if that is his concern ... why was he STILL fucking her when he knew she was LIKELY cheating WEEKS and WEKS ago? Wasn't he STD threat just as big weeks ago???
she was whoring and he still fucked her
good story ,but you came up a little short this time.
Jack...don't you know that many readers...like
myself are tired of the guy getting away with murder...Oh he went to jail and all that but there isn't anything as satisfying as a good old fashion ass kicking... Well I would have made sure that he met Bubba in prison and graduated with a very large ass hole and a penchance for big black cock up his ass.
Unreal story
Just how many real men exist in this fucked up world that would have sex with their wife after what this asshole knew about her. Very poor characterzation.
No suspense
Normally I'm a big fan, but this story was over by the first paragraph. There was no tension created or resolution solved. We all knew what had happened and what the outcome would be in the first few lines. Jim came across as cold and, although I felt some sympathy for his wife, I also couldn't determine her motive for falling so far. Losing her job? Big whoop.
Continuing Sex
Like some of the others, I have a problem with the husband being dumb enough to have sex with her after he knows what's going on. He surely knows he is being exposed to std's! And I would have liked to have heard more pain and anguish from her about destroying their lives like she did.
cockolding story
The husband should have known right away when she denied him her pussy and wanted to suck him off in her mouth.
Pat
Atlanta,Ga
he he
who can refuse sex w/ somebody you love? maybe if you cant get it up. LOL. liked the story. well written. and i do agree, it's not easy being in such a situation. especially, if its someone you love.
Not pleased
My opinion is as like angiquesophie and carlm69. The suspense left at the point of story he had the first vague suspicion. He knows, but he does nothing to clear the situation of their marriage. I think, it's not a normal behaviour. Because I am german?
I would have expected a big bang
Nucleus
* By the way, I like your writing
Bland Content
Not much of a story. Does anyone know what a "story" is anymore? If the story is written with proper punctuation and uses good grammar, I'll read darned near anything. But to keep me interested, there's got to be something beyond that. A story has a pace, a tempo. Things happen and characters react to them with emotions and actions. Jack, old bean, this story has one tempo -- a steady drone that never changes and ends just about where it started. Very disappointing to see this from a writer with your talents.
re: Bland Content
That pretty much says it for me: well written, but a little one note.
The only other thing is the same as the one marked "why was he STILL fucking her if he knew weeks ago." Suddenly he's worried about STDs, after fucking her all that time.
Less Than Satisfying
Generally I have liked the writings of Jack Straw, in particular the stories 'Jealousy' and 'Marriage on the Rocks' come to mind. But 'Smoke and Mirrors' just didn't have the tension that it needed to be really good. We knew from the start and from several hints along the way that the marriage was doomed. If the hints weren't enough the over the top sex in the motel with multiple partners foretold the demise of the marriage.**** One other thing was the hold the boss had over Ann. Apparently the fact that she had done a little coke 9 years before coupled with the potential loss of her job was justification in her mind to engage in extramarital sex. Ann was portrayed as a strong woman, the straw that stirred the drink. Why would such a woman allow herself to be blackmailed into sex because of some coke usage almost a decade in the past? It just didn't make sense to me.****Nevertheless I will continue to look forward to any offerings by Jack Straw.
While I basically liked the story, I have to agree
....With a few posters.
The first thing that crossed my mind when I saw this was "Ewww, how could anyone keep having sex with thier wife if they knew she was having sex (and if you didn't know for sure had to assume unprotected sex) with someone else you didn't know?" And if it bothered you enough to divorce her, why would you keep doing it till you got all the sex you could stand out of her? I mean one thing the main character said that I noticed was that he asked her "how she could put his life at risk" by having sex with multiple different men, but it wasn't till he saw her with 4 other men (and at one time 3 men at the same time) that this thought seemed to cross his mind. That would have been my "first" thought not last. Specially after the time she decided to "allow" him anal and he though how loose she felt. I don't believe I could have kept having sex with her till it was impossible for me to deny it any longer. And then he did it again the Thursday after he "saw" her allowing different men to keep coming and going out of the hotel room she was in then went to the gym like nothing was wrong???
What else didn't make sense to me at times, and a lot of authors like to gloss over it, is if the innocent party's in the story are really worried about putting the kids first why don't stop sleeping with the cheating mate when they find out that the wife/husband is cheating on them and start some routine testing for STD's? I mean if they both get HIV or Herpes they will have those diseases for the rest of their, possibly, short lives. And it limits their dating choices in the future if they decide to move on with their lives. Why would they want to take those chances and leave their kids to grow up the best they could without them?
I agree with some that you gave the outcome of the story way at the begininnng, but maybe next time if you decide to go this path maybe say something like "Let me tell everyone a story of how my marriage collapsed with the love of my life"? or something like that. Just a suggestion, but it didn't really bother me much. But to be honest I didn't mind that I knew the outcome before I got to the end, because when you kept saying over and over the marriage was dead in the story I was curious what made it be over.
I liked the story as a whole, but the whole "I knew she was cheating, but until I was beat in the face with the fact that I could no longer ignore the cheating, I kept having sex because it was the best sex I've ever had in my life" rational just seemed out of place given the ending. It was like "I could have handled the cheating and the other men, but when you started pulling a train it killed the marriage." Because if she hadn't crossed some unknown boundry they would have stayed married through out all of this.
Thanks for the intresting read though
-Risq
Well Written Story
Interesting that both Jack and Ohio post non-wimp, been-done-wrong husband stories at about the same time (see "Brisket"). Differences in approach by the two protagonists, but very similar no-nonsense attitudes and no reconciliation in both stories.
Oh, well, it's her loss
Really? I think AND the kids have a major loss, too; that of a loving wife and mother. Plus he mentioned that raising two kids as a single parent isn't that easy. Men aren't hardwired that way, anyway.
Good story but with some cooling off time for him and resolution for her maybe they could start over and try dating??
Loving Wives?
What does this have to do with loving wives? Its a story about some poor blackmailed woman and a vengeful small-minded man. Why didn't she come to him right away? Becasue she knew he was a tightass jerk.
Dear Lv2hvefn only a true bitch could say what
you did about the man. The fucking whore of a WIFE even said she loved it!! And that's why shewanted to fuck her husband. So sit down and shut the fuck up! Stop bashing the man it was the WIFE who broke her vows you dumb slut!
Some people still dont get it. For some things
there is no excuse good enough, no reason good enough, and no time long enough to forget it and and get back together. These forgive her and get back together people are the same ones that say, well the apologized not forget it and get going. Wrong an apology means I wronged you and I am sorry, it is not punishment, it is not for forgives, it is not for forgetting. The woman destroyed the family, nearly destroyed her husband, and is the one that has ruined the home life of the children. It is not the man's responsibility nor duty to let her pay some penalty and then let her back into the home. She chose to become a whore for something that if the boss had broudht it up she could have sued for illegal termination. She was not a slut, she was not a cheater, she was a whore. Whores take money for sex, when have sex as a part of your job, as a condition of employment, or to provide services for customers or your employer, you are a whore. In for a penny, in for a pound, makes no difference. What makes no sense is this is a small town and she is being pimped out of a small motel with men going in and out and the bank boss is hiring the room. Everyone in the town knows about it. She would already be known as a whore and hubby would already have been discussed in the town as a cuckold. the entire family would be held up to ridicule and talk and the kids would have heard about it in school. The other point of contention is diseases that come up. Unprotected sex with anyone means you have had unprotected sex with everyone they have had sex with. In so stating, she as a whore, is being used by men who use whores and sluts. The odds of STDS, AIDS, Hep C, and everything else is now almost 100% in this day and time, even using condoms no matter what town you live in. All involved need to notified by legal means of their highly likely chance of being infected by one disease or another and these letters would also be given to the wives of the men involved, this is a legal and health issue (lots of fun will come out of this). That should have been one of the conditions of the divorce agreement before the legal divorce. Testing of wife, husband, and children will be necessary for years for delayed sppearance of the diseases. Actually I am in agreement with one critic who says if you are afraid of diseases and suspect why touch and in the regard I agree totally, find excuses, delay responses, avoid kissing, yes kissing. Makes a fun life with a cheater doesnt it. The woman was a slut and it seems weak willed, after all she used drugs and now has a sex need with many men. In her case she doesnt need counselors, nor therapist, she needs medical and phychological help for years to get rid of her addictive behavior. No you dont take cheaters back, they can and will cheat again if the opportunity arises and the excuses offer themselves. And no you dont want a whore raising kids. Out with the trash time to move on and up in life. Thjis is a loving wife tale, story of a loving wife who went astray and a husband who loved her.
Good story with flaws
I thought that the story as a whole was decent but that there were a number of issues which detracted from what could have been a better story.
Coming up with a good reason for cheating in a blackmail type story, which this is, to me is always difficult. In this story, the driving force for the wife to submit was the fact that she had used drugs in the past. So what! Her drug use was in the past and she had dealt with it. Not a good reason to submit to a blackmailer for sex.
Then to allow yourself to be videotaped having the sex is also ludicrous. Filming the sex could only perpetuate the blackmail. The wife would have to be crazy if she ever expected to get out from under being blackmailed. The drug use was a done deal and wasn't going away and a tape of her having sex would only cement her to her blackmailer.
The wife's change in her sexual behavior, both in sex acts and in agression on her part, could only serve as a red flag to her husband. She might as well have started wearing a tee shirt with the message "I'm fucking around" on it. Very dumb.
The husband accepting the wife's new sexual attitude for so long, just because it was good sex, is also hard to believe.
The husband should also have insisted in the divorce that she discontinue her sexual activity and get tested for STDs. After all, he was insisting on custody of the children because of the wife's sexual behavior. If the behavior continued, she would be just as bad a role model divorced as she would be married.
Well told but flawed
Well-written with jack_straw's usual flair. His prose is compact and reads easily.
I agree with some of the previous posters: the story's pacing is off. It's slow and somewhat tedious. Perhaps it's due to the lack of narrative drive because the plot is staid.
Like another commenter pointed out, the reason for her acceptance of Spradling's blackmail is weak and, moreover, in today's office climate, the barest hint of sexual harrassment puts HR departments into a frenzy. I just can't accept that his wife would allow an earlier dalliance with drugs to influence her thinking when all she had to do was to document the abuse to get Spradling tossed out on his ass.
Sorry, jack_straw, the story doesn't fly for me. I like the writing but can't give the tale top marks. I thank you for your efforts.
Good read, as always
Jack-straw; unlike so many other posters, I liked the story. Although the ending was almost pre-ordained, nonetheless, I liked his comments about how many years of marriage, how good a mother she was, so many good qualities that might have allowed him to seek to forgive her & move past what she had done. While I'm certainly no fan of reconciliation at any costs, the more egregious the behaviour, the more certain it should be that, any other factors notwithstanding, the husband should kick that slutty ass to the curb, and move on. I could see how he could have attempted a reconciliation if she had come to him at the outset, but after weeks of that behaviour and her admitting that she "loved it", he had no other choice. So, all in all, a good read for me
Well told but flawed
I think Alvaron53 summarized it well. You write well and most of your stories are great ,but his one lacked any suspense or any emotion. It was obvious from the beginning that something was amiss, but Jim appeared to be too dumb to face the problem until it was much too late. Looking for your next story.
the Ct. Yankee
okay,,,,
so, for years, he's been begging her to allow him her ass and she's always said NO! and no sucking him off either...
then one fine Wednesday, she comes home, howlering, "Honey, I am SO WET and I want to SUCK YOU OFF, dear beloved,,," and she does just that,,, making his eyebrows raised in a quizzical way,, hmmmm, he said,,, what's gotten into her?
and then more INCRDIBLE sex the following few nights,,, and then the NEXT Wednesday, after her regular fuck sessions (she said's its blackmail first but now her butt's so lose, she's starting to enjoy it a lot; but of course, HE won't know it until when it is already too late),,, anyway, the next Wednesday, it's "Honey, I think I'm gonna let you have what you've always asked for,,, my butt!!! But I wann suck you first! Gosh, I love you so much,,, here, touch me,,, see how wet I am for you, dear beloved?""""
and by NOW he's PRETTY SURE she's been fucking around,,, but, my gosh, he jumps right into bed and sucks her to multiple orgasms!~ and thene they got the oil/lub and they lubed her butt and he sinked right in,,,, uh????, it's kinda loose, don't you think, honey? (but he didn't say it, because no matter what, NOW she's allowed him IN her butt, so he's not gonna bitch about it, even if it seemed, well, really not that necessary to use lubbing oil,,,,
and then, BAM!, "This is what I want you to do: You have 4 minutes to get up stairs, pack a few bags and head out. Our marriage is over and I don't want to hear any thing about it, or see your tears, okay?"
She packs, walks out the door, looks back, with tears in her eyes, and says "I will always love you, you know that, don't you? They blackmailed me, you know that! I didn't wanna do it, especially multiple guys, at first, but they threatened to expose my past cocaine use, you know that,,, so I did it to shut them up,, you also know that. But I love you so much!"
A bit exaggerated, but that's essentially what happened. I mean, come on!
I LOVE a Happy Ending
Gotta give it a hundred just cause it's a no wimps ending. To bad he can't get past it, find a good women and get on with life.
I do not get it...
you wrote an outstanding story with great emotion and realism but still the reconciliation-at-all-cost crowd speak about them getting back together. What does Ann have to do to end all talk about reconciliation? Does she have to use hardcore drugs? Does she have to pull tricks as a part of her job? Does she have to fuck unprotected such that she may give her husband a STD? Oh -wait Ann did all of those things!_ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
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Divorce is a very good solution for two people who can not live together. I know siblings who would give their life for their other sibling but who can not live together. There is no doublt that Jimmy at the end of this story still loved and forgave Ann. But that is not the point. Ann's actions fundamentally changed their relationship. Even when she knows that Jimmy knows about her cheating on him she still go out for her Wednesday afternoon fun? She had a week to see how this situation was negatively affecting him and still she carried on. She lied when confronted about it. She wanted to be "forced" into being a slut so she would not have to take responsibility for her actions. The fact that their sex life only got supercharged when she cheated and then fell off also pointed to Jimmy's inadequacies as her lover._ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
But hey a few months in therapy and a few "I am sorry"s is all that is needed according to the reconciliation-at-all-cost crowd to let them date and get back together again. Never mind that Jimmy could never trust her again (that is just male insecurities). Never mind that if he takes her back Ann would know that Jimmy would take her back if she made a "mistake" again. Never mind that Jimmy would always know that he is her second class lover._ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
Thanks for not having Jimmy as a single parent to pick up a young hottie so soon after the divorce. Overall, an outstanding story!
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SleeplessinMD
Predictable but perfect ending for this slut!
Great job on the story. Somewhat predictable but still it is great to read about justice being serviced on these slut-wife characters. If it cheats like a slut, lies like a slut, then "no doubt" it is indeed a "cheating slut-wife". LOL The only thing we could add is if she somehow manages to disappear and kill herself so the poor kids do not have to grow up with a slut-mother. Thanks again for your efforts, author - you are really appreciated!
Interesting comments
An unusually high quality set of comments here, and I thank all of you for your input. Almost everyone who commented did so in a civil, constructive manner. I'm one writer who doesn't mind seeing my stories picked apart, as long as it is done without engaging in personal attacks. Regardless of the quality of the writing, us authors put a lot of time and effort into these stories, and at least we have the guts to put our work out there in the open for it to be picked over. There were a lot of issues raised about a lot of the elements in this story that weren't apparent in the writing process. I really thought this was going to be one of my better stories, but obviously it fell a little short of the mark, and for some of the reasons that have been brought out in these comments. Looking ahead, this is probably going to be the last cheating wife story I do for awhile. I seem to have run out of truly original ways to make this sort of thing interesting, and maybe that affected the way the plot seemed to drag in places. At any rate, thanks to all who took the time to read this, and all of my other work. I do appreciate you. We'll have better days soon enough.
not good
I agree with Alvaron53,there is no 'story' because the tension/suspense is destroyed in the first paragraph. Also, the wife is completely unconvincing as she is pushy and intelligent and would just have gone fo harrassment and blackmail complaints.
My real annoyance, as in many stories here, is the husband's comments about the children. Any man who just regards his kids as a bargaining chip, a way of punishing his wife, is beneath contempt. Jimmy has no thought of the best interests of the kids, who they should live with, and thereby loses any sympathy I may have had for him.
A good story
Not one of your best but I was entertained.
Thank you
PT
the wife was a slut
if she had of told her husband, he couldve helped her sue her boss, but since she didnt. but sued the boss after the divorce, she knew what she was doing
Couldn’t care much about either of them
Both main characters were unappealing and did not leave me with much reason to care for what happens to them. Frankly, I prefer that at least one of the main characters is at least either intelligent or has an appealing personality. Here there was nothing to hold into in either of the categories. *****
The husband is one of the most compartmentalized male characters I can remember reading in L.W. It seems that the neuro- transmissions between the parts in his brain responsible to thinking and those which are responsible to feelings and then between each of the former and the rest of his body (especially his sex drive) are few; far between and very slow. It would be very much like him to consider: ‘Hmm, I just came to the conclusion that in all likelihood my wife is cheating on, but I am hanging out and talking with my wife and it feels very pleasant that suddenly she is so solicitous of sex with me; wait a minute! I feel some unexpected development is taking place under my belt. It’s all so amazing; I’ll stick around with myself and see what I am going to do next’... *****
The wife on top of being as dumb as they come (blackmail to sex at the workplace by her boss because of past drug use? She is either very dumb or came up with a lousy lie (Then she is dumb again…), she also cares so much for her husband that she has to continue the cheating. He is lucky that she pretty much wrote the road map as to how to catch her (he would never get to it on his own): Tuesday is for pre-performance nervousness; Wednesdays are for guilt - sex (turned later into free tutorials for the husband. Few unchanged repetitions – and voila! He finally gets it. *****
So when, even if for different reasons, both main characters are predictable, slow to think and to act, and the wife does not even have the one redeeming quality of being minimally tolerable as a character - there is not much left to worry about one way or another when the story ends. *****
I appreciate your effort and your writing in general and looking forward for your next story.
a slut for a wife and dumby for a hubby
eating her and fucking her after he found out she fucking men is signing his dead warrant with aids and stds.hubby to weak in his dealing with the lover.
Pretty dispassionate, huh?
Damn, Jack...that was damned dispassionate for the guy to just toss out about fifteen years without apparently even lengthy consideration. I'm picturing a gorgeous woman, totally fucking hot, the mother of your kids, strong, confident, and suddenly seduced into some God-awful behavior. But NO extenuating circumstances? Have at least a smidgeon of patience to find out what the fuck happened and why!
Justice was served!
Stupid slut deserved the outcome!
Thank you
Well written story with logical ending.
Give her a second chance
Jack the husband should at least give her another chance suppose he was drugging her and while they were together with Spratt so he can control her did Hubby ever think about that?
The judge should have given him 20 yrs for what he did to her
and her family and Hubby should give her some consideration the length of time they have been together and stuck with her by trying to get her into a institute for drug counceling.
Give her a second chance - WTF?
First of all, a great story with a "realistic" and justified ending. However, the comment prior to this one wanted to know why he did not giver a second chance? This slut wife got off way to easy the way it was. Lying, cheating and being a whore is grounds for permanent removal from the gene pool. Perhaps that person should read the whole story again.
No price paid
The husband is a wimp. He knows something is wrong and because he is getting great sex does nothing about it. Wimp. As for the wife paying a price. She paid nothing. She still probably does a gangbang a week. She got paid six figures for her fucking. And she got to blame cocaine for it all. Sorry not buying that one. It was a deliberate betrayal of her husband. She is a common slut.
I like the wife. Kick the husband out! hehehe
He is a wimp. Kick him out of there! hehe
I'll take her for myself! hehe
I want that woman! Kick the husband into the sea!
Wimpy fool of a man! Keep the woman! hehe
liked it but...
js..good story until the end. IT was underwhelming. It was like a hole in the bag just happened and the whole story just leaked out. Sorry. Jim
WATCH
Looks like HE should haver had less drinking and sports, tail-gating and kept a eye on his wife. You lost wimp--the boose tank rehab for you.
Oh, well It's her loss ...
... and the children's loss and his loss, too. But take heart and remember the Literotica motto: To forgive is to be weak! To confront and offer a chance to reform is to be weak! To consider the children's needs is to be weak! To be anything but self-centered in the face of cheating is to be weak! This husband fucked up, and, in the process, left sadness for himself, for his wife, and for his children. He loses! But at least he wasn't a wimp!
Sorry
I love a happy ending as much as the next guy but no one would get over this. She loved it, wanted to do it and didn't worry about her kids or her husband, had plenty of chances to stop but wouldn't. Perhaps after therpy and finding out what she is she could move on and have a relationship with someone, but for now she is toxic.
Crap!!!!!!!!
Back to the drawing board??
Hubby at fault...
I think it was hubby who threw away his perfect marriage, he tried to get benefit from her cheating. If he knew from very first day , then they were perfect for each other. She was weak but you were supposed to help her out. If you were really so proud man you would not have been with her when you first time find out. No one should try to get benefit from cheating, she could have been fallen for her lover. Hubby in story was really trying to get rid of her in first place , i think. You know she is cheating, you should have given her some hint what she could lose, but no you have to wait you have to see with your eyes. Really wimpy.
Dissappointing Really...
We expect better from you, What type of character it is? Once it was ok and then it was not ok. You knew she was having an affair and you did not stop it, you went along it for MONTHS, what type of of asshole hubby was? He made me sick. I liked wife, she was week, she was stupid, you ought to know people once addicted to something are very weak to any persistence, they need to be taken care of. People who can be addicted are those who does not have enough strength to fight, and it not something you need to remember, you will come to know about these people when you live with them, you will easily agree that they really were weak, I dont say what she did was not wrong, but you ought know she did not cut her hubby off like other cheating wives. First she was forced, and then she was blackmailed, and then she slowly become addicted, does not it show her willpower. Isn't that boys got into smoking, isn't that people got into drugs, at least she was not pulling any crap like, middle-age or lust or drunk, she was telling complete truth. Both at fault, both should have worked it out. We test people when nothing was at risk, but hubby went well with cheating when it gets out of hands, he want out, he did not even tried to help, not even once, she need a stronger man, who can give her some strength to fight, she is better off without willing-cuck. When you love some one you fight for one.
great story
great story, he did everything right except for giving her anything. She showed ewhat kind of mother, wife and person she was, she got away easy and i feel sorry for the next fool.
she knew jack
She had a weakness that was exploited by jack. It fed a need in her, and she (happily?) went along with the wednesday program. Clearly, she balanced out the wednesday tryst and coming clean, and she made her decision. There was a portion of her settlement set aside for the kids?
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