All Comments on 'Emily and Jo Ch. 02'

You can not enjoy this story because it is SOOOOOOOO porrly written. Please consider dictating this story to someone with an understanding of grammar, especially punctuation, so that the result is a coherent tale that does not grate the nerves of the reader. Honestly, if you can't do better than this, don't submit anymore. You're giving lesbian sex a bad, no check that, DUMB name. GEEEESH!!!

Bit difference between 'to' and 'too'.

That is all.

Anonymous in USA

GET A LIFE YOU SAD TWAT!

JELB_42 Well done!!! don't let idiots that can't even spell their own name, put you off submitting.

with anonymous. Very poorly written, and in all seriousness, if I had professor who spoke the English language as badly as she is portrayed in this story, I'd be out to get her fired. I suggest you get yourself an editor for this and future work. If you seriously want to succeed, then you need to work much harder on getting it right. No amount of sex in a story will get it past readers who at least look to proper grammar and spelling. Sorry, but it had to be said.