All Comments on 'Sisters Seduce Daddy'

I really enjoyed your story and hope it continues, but, please get someone to edit your work next time. The missed words and spelling errors were a little hard to follow.

Numb3rs belong in l1sts not st0r1es. One needs to be careful using numbers when describing two beautiful women. Also, way too short. It was barely an intro.

loved the full panties and natural feel of things wish i was there

Numbers of ten or less should be spelled out and not written as numbers. The word too (meaning also) is never written as a number.

...before me have pointed out some of the errors in your story. Using numbers; the difference between to and too; the use of 'relief' and 'belief' instead of relieve and believe all spoil this story. Use a spell/grammar checker and also proof read what you have written before submitting your stories. Read it to yourself out loud to see if it flows; you'll soon see a lot of the mistakes.

Hope there are more parts to this story and soon..

so ok you do need to do some editing, but don't let that stop you from writing more..

again Great Story..

Thank You

and then it stopped... hurry with the next chapter please. Also do a little editing, but apart from that it was a pretty good story with a nice plot.

this is your first story, and does have a few small flaws, but the ideas, images, and characters are hot. The art of writing develops with practice, so keep writing and you will improve! I've read better written stories that were painfully boring, and yours was not.

Peace.

Any story is ruined if the reader has to stop to figure out what the proper spelling is and what appropriate grammar should be used. Ouch!

We all have to start somewhere. Don't worry too much about being perfect. Get your ideas out, and write what you like. I've had some success working with some editors here, but I have had real grief with others. I enjoyed your story, and look forward to the next installment.

very promising.

The basics of the story are good although not original. The sentence construction is poor and the use of past tense often incorrect. "I seen it" should be "I saw it". Don't use numerals in written text IE "We should get 1" should always be written "We should get one."

Oddly enough I actually gave the story a four out of five. I really like the story so far! ...I say oddly because it has issues. The grammar/sentence structure is horrible!! Then there are words just flat missing, like it was too much of a bother. Worst of all though was the author treating this like a cellphone text message; 'do you want one or two pieces?' Not 'do you want 1 or 2 pieces?' Ugh!! Or getting clippy like 'do want 1 or 2 pieces?' Rofl!

Anyway, fun story, just needs attention to detail!!

It's "I saw", not "I seen".

really good enjoyable not my expertise so no critique